Words ( for H.M)

a poem for a writer on this site

as wood is grey and bricks red dust

                    fallen beams church each space

                    as pigeons dance under slate

a house with unlocked doors

                   under a sky beclouded

                   each window glazed with light.

Reviews

[Emily Feret]

Thank you for sharing, what a gift!

[Shmoke-Sifted Heftlande..]

this is epically transcendental
*bows*, as reverently as possible, under the circumstances

Someone said this is a riddle
I see it as the lack of grammar, the very exact thing
that accentuates the amazing pacing of the peace

it's ironic, and I love me some irony

and I adore the ending

very well done, sir

[Pete Langley]

Whoever this might be, it brings to mind an old saying in England...."There`s snow on the roopf, but a fire in the cellar", This very graphic, Les, with superb word choices making a very cohesive whole. Thanks for sharing. P.

[Dean]

I thnk that is all a serious poet really wants...to write "a couple of good poems." Now you know how to do that. I'm still learning, but if I live long enough, I may get there.

Enjoying my visit.

[Leslie Philibert]

Thanks for the review and the kind words.

[Eric Cox]

Cool. You have a unique style I like very much, makes the imagery so fine.

[SHEEMA HUQ]

there are times when you write in a riddle-format, which can be a stimulating trial, as well as puzzling, I think that the first stanza is great because, you enable the reader to piece the lines disjointed sentences together to visualise a set of ocurrences, interesting