The Last Harvest

a hard one to write

A forest without moonlight

A moon with no light

If there would be moonlight

there would be the shapes of trees.

But there is no moonlight.

Only moon.

Harvesters work the fields.
Shaitan.

Mengele.

Ivory faces with the eyes of owls.

Slices of animals ; bloodcorn ; plant

the crops of Treblinka and Verdun.

We have stolen the passion from the killing.

Reviews

[quinfinn]

moon without light. angel of death. holocaust. whew! this is deep without question. "ivory faces with the eyes of owls" who could ever forget those pictures? i think the last line speaks volumes...."we have stolen the passion from killing" profound and resonant. incredibly poignant and masterfully penned.....

[Ken Simm.]

The wars that ultimately mean nothing but we bring such thoughts as you have out of them. I hesitate to say wonderful because of the subject matter but remarkable it certainly is.

[David Scott]

This read like the last apocalypse. LIke angels of death. Mysterious.

[Trigorin]

Not bad. You use some very good imagery here, but I do think you've used 'moonlight' just a tiny bit too much in the first stanza. I understand what you're going for but I feel like it'd be much more evocative if you could phrase it differently after the first line.

[Leslie Philibert]

A good point, thanks for the review. What I was trying to do in the first verse was
to build up a tension with just a few elements, with repeats and contradictions,
so I wrote it this way with intent...does it work ? I will leave the reader to decide !

[Pete Langley]

Both ideology and lack of it create monsters through history. The indifference to lives thrusts it`s head with almost metronomic regularity on this planet, as if it is inherent.
This is a dire, impatchful piece. Les. P.

[Sami Khalil]

"We have stolen the passion from the killing."
This poem is great and written with so much thought in it but this last sentence blew me away. That is so deep and true. Thank you for sharing and inspiring others...:)

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Leslie a subject like this is so emotive it is always hard to write. Reading the opening stanza I just didn't get it but then it hit home! And wow made sense. The holocaust is so engrained in us all but still the killing continues.

[Rhianne Ney]

this is a unique style to start with. The lines are jumbling and were pretty great to play with. I can say that it was an art with the way you put it and the way it was structured. The mystery fells and everything is just adding up to all and creating such is great... LOLz

100/100

~Keep writing~