Girl

just a picture, an image

Crouching as many curves

                        in a bronze spring

                        a road full of turns

Tugging your knees

                       into the apples of your chest

                       hair seaweed over rocks

Hidden the face

                       between a bone tunnel

                       a circle perfect in itself.

Reviews

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Lovely metaphors that paint a rich picture. I get an image of a bronze sculpture of a mermaid/siren. Like Claire the bone tunnel made me search for meaning, perhaps signifies a marble sculpture?

[Emily B]

always good to read what you write

[SHEEMA HUQ]

Hi Leslie, I think that this is a tremendously accomplished poem, I really like neat, succsinct impressions potrayed by your skillful rationing of sentences, visually this is very satisfying also (to consider the image portrayed and the actual poem format),
well done to you

[An owl on the moon]

You help us glimpse the soft lines and form of pure wonder... like a journey across heart and soul.

[Eric Cox]

Cool imagery here, an excellent piece. Very nicely done.

[Tree]

A beautiful haunting scene. This one I'll keep with me. Very cool vivid imagery.

[Tina Kline]

This makes me think of a mermaid sitting on a rock down by the beach and I also saw as I read a lovely girl stature in a setting down by the sea. I really love this one!

[Ufi Auttorri ~ Amy C. T..]

A girl, crouching/sitting on a bronze beach... curly hair, like seaweed, tumbling over her back and shoulders. Hands circle the face while elbows jut forward over the knees as she gazes into the distant ocean horizon. I hear it, see it, smell it, feel it. I'm curious as to what she's thinking, if anything. Perhaps she's achieved a state of no-mind and has become the rocks, the seaweed, the apple of life or perhaps the perfect circle.

Nicely done.

[Coyote Song]

Very creative and skillfully done. This gives a strong picture or image of a girl closing herself off from those around her or perhaps protecting herself. Or maybe she's just relaxing. Anyway, I enjoyed this poem and its possibilities.

[Claire Twinn]

Three images in one, combined to an unusual picture, Wish I knew more about her face though, the bone tunnel seems a bit empty or ghostly- or perhaps that's the idea?