Day Dreams and Magic

 

I lay upon the grass one day
And dreamed of places far away
Of palace gates and carpet rides
Of dragon scales and moonbeam slides

Where butterflies were spun of gold
And Unicorns with fairies told
The tales of selkies, magic wands
Where rainbows dipped to drink from ponds

I rode the clouds amongst the trees
Catching rides on wings of bee's
I danced a jig in clovers four
With elves and sprites from times of yore

I followed bunnies to their dens
Chased fireflies to earth again
To proudly stand on hollow ground
Where knights in armor once abound

Then back to sky I flew on leaves
That carried songs upon my sleeves
Back to the field where I reposed
To end my dream as daylight closed

Reviews

[John Phoenix Hutchinson..]

Congratulations this poem has been "approved" for publication in...

THE MAGICAL MYTHICAL MYSTERY COMPENDIUM.
-Metaphysical, Mystical & Fantastical Poetry of the Arcane

By John Phoenix Hutchinson and Others. (c) 2012

Please feel free to submit other poems as you are not limited to one entry. Also please write a short "bio" about yourself and send to me via private message. This will be published along with your poem. Thanks J.P.H.

Anyone wanting to make Submissions to this Writers Cafe "e" book Project can do so on my group page, the deadline is 1st of November 2012.

[Wildecat]

I love fantasy, and this is an exceptional poem. Thanks for also for the kind review on ( Homeless)

[Emily Rose]

Ah, what a great romp into fantasy! You cover a lot of ground in only a few lines, taking your reader to a lot of places. It's a crazy dream, and you manage to hit a lot of different, well-loved places in fantasy. I also really like the idea of an 'inverted" dream: you WAKE when at "daylight's close" - that's a far cry from sleeping in a nice warm bed. What sweet dreams come to us when we lie under the sun! Great job!

I have three little suggestions: the line "the tales of selkies and magic wands" seems to upset the meter a bit, so you might want to fix it. Also, "bee's" shouldn't be possessive. This one is more nitpicky, but you might want to reconsider calling them "golden slides" since you use the world "gold" in the next stanza. It seems a little repetitive to describe something as "golden" twice, especially since it's such a short piece. I'd recommend changing the first "golden" to "silver."

Once again, great piece!

[Ray Hamilton]

This is a wonderful write
I enjoyed the ride through your dreams
Thanks for sharing Ray { Not a Poet }