Lost and Found

When you can be who you are on the inside on the outside, you're free.

She walked through the double doors.

Wood framed.

Glass paned.

Her hair draped over her eyes.

A steel blue pierced through this shield that she hid behind.

Streaming black cast down her back.

Looking down as she turned around and sat,

Standing for the first time.

The cold, leather chair cutting into her skin contrasting the burning she felt from within.

The superficial definition of her being staring back at her created a hating that she would stand no more.

Right hand in her pocket she grasped a locket that held what was left of her mother inside.

In this she found the strength that she needed to declare herself

Unbroken.

Unbeaten.

Undefeated.

One cut with two silver blades put it all behind as she saw herself for the very first time.

Light blue eyes, intense yet shy.

Free from the prison within her mind,

Her reflection finally mirroring the inside.

 

Author's Note

pretty much the same except i tried to make it easier to read

Reviews

[deeps]

Such detail and imagery, I still have a locket that was my grandmothers. well written

[Wolfwind Words]

The imagery is phenomenal! Your words take us on a journey through mind and thought, ponderment and wonderment.
This piece speaks of letting go of the confines of societal mass judgement and breaking into one's own flow of individuality. It pulses with a sense of impowerment.

Great Ink!
Wolfie

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

In this world we live today where the media and society try to tell us what is right and what we should be like often causes people to be who they aren't or even cause them to rebel so much and still not be who they are causing great conflict... I really like this little piece for it really emulates just such a case in point.

[vanishing]

nice imagery, confusing storyline, i feel it's halfway there. i think the idea needs to be refined and clearer, and the form needs to be broken up to accentuate specific elements in seperate sentences, there is a quality of thought that makes the reader feel the author's heart, overall a pleasure to read, thanks

[melissa]

Wondeful detail, i loved it!!!!! :)

[John McGrael]

sounds like this girl is getting a haircut to cut off her bangs so her eyes show...

...if thats wrong then i completely misunderstood the piece :P

but i really like the imagery, how you never said eyes or hair but we got that it meant that, like, "a steel blue pierced..." meant her eyes and "streaming black cast down her back" meant her hair

i really like this, its super cool

[Eagle Cruagh]

Clean cut, penetrating and incisive poetry .

The voice of the steel blue eyes and the cutting
dialogue. Penetrating verse.

Beautiful writing , wonderful use of the language.

My rating---- 100 %

------ Eagle Cruagh