Ramshackle Army

Ramshackle Army 

With nowhere to run and no place to go 
We oozed out of the hills in ragged groups 
A ramshackle army, not frontline warriors 
Our weapons blunt and in need of repair 
As we looked down on the mass of enemy 
Our line weak and rough as we faced them 
We entered into the battle so reluctantly 

Into the valley of no return 

Then suddenly you came smiling at death 
With your careless proclamative broad strokes 
Riding a fine horse and wearing silver armour 
With your long sword of steel shining high 
Your men behind you on their stallions 
That kicked up sods and clods of earth 
The hooves causing a thunderous roar 

On the field of blood 

Never had I been more pleased to hear 
The ring of steel as my world went black 
As I became defeated and overwhelmed 
Beaten and bloodied, pushed to the ground 
Later I found out that we had won the day 
We had turned things around by a whisker 
Because you had made a death defying run 

When all seemed lost 

                    © 2014 Leigh Green

Reviews

[MsJewel]

Very powerful and well written. Seperating the last line between verses is very effective. A great read!

:) Julie

[Leigh]

Thank you Ms J

[emmajoy]

'When all seemed lost' .. .. and that's how it is, not only in war but in life. The skill of survival rings throughout even with the bursts of doubt and fear; tis a modern battle here reflected in the past.

[Leigh]

Exactly,well put

[Cyndi Goodgame]

Done very well. I liked it.

[Leigh]

Thanks, appreciated

[Shirlena]

Ramshackle Amy was a beast at war huh...this was a refreshing change from the usual subjects of poem. I flinched a little as I thought it would get too graphic for me stand and I made it and it was well written and interesting.

[Leigh]

I'll leave the graphics to your imagination, thank you

[Frieda P]

An affecting read. There's that hint of never giving up hope even when faced with horrid dilemmas. Even when we're defeated, all is not lost.

[Leigh]

You got it, your interpretation is spot on as usual

[Dayran]

A good clear demonstration of letting go ... and trusting your beliefs. Good one Leigh.

[Leigh]

One word, hope

[Marie]

Very good. Defeat turns to victory, because of one act of bravery.

[Leigh]

Yes I like a happy ending, thank you

[Adam Whitworth]

Nicely done, enjoyed it Leigh

[Leigh]

Hello and Thank you

[Baby Ricochet]

Brought to mind attack helicopters like apaches being called in during heavy fire fights. Good, no make that great poem

[Leigh]

Thought you'd like this one Baby

[Leigh]

Inspired by the proclamative guitar sound in 'All These Things That I've Done' by The Killers