Thought Sheep Assembled

 

Almost a second ago things were just fine
Then came the inevitable passing of time
Words neatly assembled vanished into air
I was left open mouthed, standing there

Like little sheep, I had them neatly penned
Not scattered about and unable to tend
I lost concentration of articulate thought
My lips were dry, I was left with nought

As I turned to you slowly to my surprise
You destroyed me with a cold look in your eyes
Then the lights just went out in my mind
And in the dark, thoughts were hard to find

So little Thought Sheep come back to me
Don’t stand eating grass so contentedly
In the dim recesses you are concealed
Come back to the bright part of my field

With my flock of Thought Sheep assembled
I will deliver my words of love untrembled
You will see just what you mean to me
In flowing lines of eloquent poetry

Reviews

[ANTO]

Wow Leigh - you have put into words that feeling I get (we probably all get, I mean) - were there is a flash of inspiration and then we are distracted and the inspiration is gone. I often like to think of these partially created things as like little angels that float into the ether to be part of another creatives work and it helps me not get too down.
Fantastic poem Leigh

[Poussiere D'Ange]

Thought sheep- Great metaphor. Just loved it! Its funny how we all think of things differently. You produced a wonderful imagery with the metaphor that made it clear and very enjoyable to read. Great job:-):-):-D.

[Dayran]

A writer writes with a relation to the subjects of his interests. It involves him and it is about him. Every write then is a self expression and its important for the developing self understanding that we stay close to what concerns us.

In avoiding too close a reference to ourselves we figure we are simply being civil but the creative energies in us seek to serve our needs and it challenges us to find a way to say the difficult things. Where we continue to create avoidance we stray into the pasture of lost sheep.

[Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)]

Nice use of symbol here, leigh. Love the concept of Thought Sheep.
We all experienced having lost with words...but then that's for temporary only. And the "Thought Sheep" will come back..."healthy and generous".

Nice poem, liegh. :)

[Girl Friday (Sarah W.)]

The fourth stanza was killer! Also loved the second stanza with the "little sheep" all "neatly penned"...such a great image and a great metaphor. This write was both abstract and tangible at the same time, which I love in poetry; gives me something to latch onto as I read. Very well done, I shall be back!

[Eileenws]

The sheep are like poetic thoughts. Very creative poem. Nicely penned. Eileen