Thought Sheep Assembled

 

Almost a second ago things were just fine
Then came the inevitable passing of time
Words neatly assembled vanished into air
I was left open mouthed, standing there

Like little sheep, I had them neatly penned
Not scattered about and unable to tend
I lost concentration of articulate thought
My lips were dry, I was left with nought

As I turned to you slowly to my surprise
You destroyed me with a cold look in your eyes
Then the lights just went out in my mind
And in the dark, thoughts were hard to find

So little Thought Sheep come back to me
Don’t stand eating grass so contentedly
In the dim recesses you are concealed
Come back to the bright part of my field

With my flock of Thought Sheep assembled
I will deliver my words of love untrembled
You will see just what you mean to me
In flowing lines of eloquent poetry

Reviews

[ANTO]

Wow Leigh - you have put into words that feeling I get (we probably all get, I mean) - were there is a flash of inspiration and then we are distracted and the inspiration is gone. I often like to think of these partially created things as like little angels that float into the ether to be part of another creatives work and it helps me not get too down.
Fantastic poem Leigh

[Droll Prole]

I'm not too fond of it when the sheep wander off. This is a great way of describing thoughts; I might keep Thought Sheep in my vocabulary haha.

[Robert Robbie Lord Dudl..]

The music of thought into the eye's core of high colours of love obscured but yet only the arrows to hit the mark in the dark rings around the roads fallen to sorrows; Good poem I like the way you write your art

[Kenneth The Poet]

You are building a mystery as this is a glimpse of thoughts that lead to potential that will inevitably become kinetic. It's like you wrote about how writer's block can itself be inspiration. Write through it I guess. Nice work here.

[Wandering Minstrel]

good piece of writing! ........

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Hi Leigh, this expresses well that feeling when we just can't say how we feel and regret not having done so. Last line I might drop the word 'my'?

[Leigh]

Done thanks for the proof read :-)

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Great, have a good weekend. Off to see Saints and Falcons this afternoon!

[Leigh]

Have a great game and weekend too Come on BCFC...

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Ah! a footie man!

[Junger]

Leigh, your pieces are still outstanding and creative, Love every piece you make because of each piece has its own emotion that is still amazing.

[Leandro Mendez]

this is so well written.. from beginning to end. great piece.

[Dr. Wood ?]

wonderful..YOU are very talented my friend...Talented indeed

[TL Boehm]

come back to the bright part of my field - ah yes. This is a wonderful poem