Timber

If a tree falls,
And no one hears,
Remind me who I am.
With fears exposed,
And soul unclothed,
Here, alone I stand.

In the dark,
And through the mist,
There's nothing in my sight.
For so long,
It's felt all wrong,
But to hope I've held on tight.

Beneath my feet,
I feel the earth,
Slowly falling away.
Through the screams,
And loathsome dreams,
I lost myself along the way.
And should you see,
That fallen tree,
Remember who I used to be.

Reviews

[emipoemi]

I like the flow of this.....scratch that - i LOVE the flow of this!! It's so musical with vivid and profound imagery. My only critique is the last line should have an "ay" rhyme not an "ee" unless you make the two other rhyming lines "ee". For being a coda AND the final line it has to pack double the punch, and the power of the delivery is undermined a bit by the fact that you have it rhyme with the couplet and not the lines that it would normally have rhymed with. Just a thought to consider. This is otherwise astoundingly well done!