She Never Knew, She Never Saw

First actual work that I've been proud of since before last summer. :)

She never knew to look beside

The things the dreams she could not hide.

She couldn’t remember the feeling of love

And love was just a memory.

 

If she could see the runner up

Maybe then it would mean her time was up

She saw the person who wanted more

But nothing had been there before.

She dreamt of things unreal and unmeant

But life was just the cruelest torment.

 

She couldn’t think to stare behind.

The love that had never been in rewind.

She couldn’t imagine the feeling of hope.

And hope was just a memory.

 

If it could be the truth she saw.

Then what else was she missing before?

If only to be the person she wanted now

She wouldn’t be waiting here wondering how

And she dreamt of things unreal and unmeant

And love was just her cruelest torment.

 

She never saw the thing before her

But how could anyone ever adore her?

For she had been through life and after

And before was just a memory.

 

She thought she’d seen kindness like this

But only after she’d nearly missed.

If only she could see the time behind

And not look back to pause and rewind.

She’d dream of things unreal and unmeant

And love was just the cruelest torment.

 

12.13.2008

Reviews

[Rose Kavanagh]

Oh, I like this a lot! Great work!
If you could put it to music I think it could be a very pretty song, as the flow is good and I found myself wanting to sing it as I read. It almost seems like something Colbie Caillat would sing, sort a of bluesy, bare-foot-on-the-beach song. That's just how I pictured it, though.
All in all, nice job! =)

[Dizzy-Izzy]

You should be proud of this, it's really good... says a woman with her finger permanently affixed to the rewind button. Have a great holiday!

[Jo Todd]

Rose is right. This reads like a song. A really REALLY great song!