The Embrace

Just before my junior year at highschool ended. Inspiration: Lara Croft original movie watched it for first time, since i bought it, with my mom." May 31st o8

A bitter end, and yet escape

From love’s enduring embrace.

The things that I hath not foreseen.

In the courage of your face.

To be the one who truly says.

That love is not forgotten.

And be the one with tears to shed.

The part that is not rotten.

If I was to forgive the past.

Than what would become of the present.

For those who want to truly last.

Make it only on resentment.

And if I was to see your face.

In the passing of the hour.

Then I would find in your embrace.

The love of a wilted flower.

 

Author's Note

One from my "notebook" series.

Reviews

[bailish]

Two points jump out at me from this poem. The first was the change in rhythm for the rhyme 'present' and resentment.' I don't believe that is a coincidence, because these lines begin your philosophy of loving.

The second were these lines:
"Then I would find in your embrace.
The love of a wilted flower."
A wilted flower is clearly not love. It is control, the kind that stifles an equal relationship.

You must let him choose. If he returns, then he's yours forever. If not, then he never was.
Beautiful. Thank you.

[Windy]

I like the flow and rhyme. "And if I was to see your face. In the passing of the hour. Then I would find in your embrace. The love of a wilted flower." I really liked that. Good job. ;)

[Aristophanes]

Leah... the use of rhymes and meter is very nicely achieved. Love not return is an elixir to this we do: poetry.... very nicely done