Brilliant poem! Absolutely stunning, Legolas! I love the soft, caring tone of the persona throughout the poem, talking about the harsh and cruel reality. The contrast in it really creates a vibrant feeling. It is truly one of the best poems you could write about another person. The third stanza, which talks about praying for the other person, is my favourite. Such a kind and divine thing to do, mildly stating the fact that the persona is in the habit of praying(and probably loves god too). Great and powerful write! Keep writing!
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12 Years Ago
Thank you so much! That means alot. Yes, praying is divine. I am a Christian if that answers your qu.. read moreThank you so much! That means alot. Yes, praying is divine. I am a Christian if that answers your question and love God very much. Thank you. I will.
12 Years Ago
Oh, I see:) so indeed your poem says a lot more than it seems to haha:) I'm not a Christian, but hey.. read moreOh, I see:) so indeed your poem says a lot more than it seems to haha:) I'm not a Christian, but hey! I love god too.
this is a really amazing poem, and touches on a lot of different things. i love it. i also love the repetition in many stanzas, i thought it really helped me feel the full impact of this poem.
Brilliant poem! Absolutely stunning, Legolas! I love the soft, caring tone of the persona throughout the poem, talking about the harsh and cruel reality. The contrast in it really creates a vibrant feeling. It is truly one of the best poems you could write about another person. The third stanza, which talks about praying for the other person, is my favourite. Such a kind and divine thing to do, mildly stating the fact that the persona is in the habit of praying(and probably loves god too). Great and powerful write! Keep writing!
Posted 12 Years Ago
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12 Years Ago
Thank you so much! That means alot. Yes, praying is divine. I am a Christian if that answers your qu.. read moreThank you so much! That means alot. Yes, praying is divine. I am a Christian if that answers your question and love God very much. Thank you. I will.
12 Years Ago
Oh, I see:) so indeed your poem says a lot more than it seems to haha:) I'm not a Christian, but hey.. read moreOh, I see:) so indeed your poem says a lot more than it seems to haha:) I'm not a Christian, but hey! I love god too.
Excellent poem. Though it begins with a deep darkness, you end it with a blazing beacon of light. And you call me a kinder person...
It's beautiful. You've filled this with your empathy, with your affection. With your caring. One day you should either read this to your friend or give them a copy. It would probably mean much to them to know how deeply you care, how you would change things for them if it was within your power.
You must have a strong blue side to you.
Well done.
-Caradoc
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12 Years Ago
Yes, because you are.
I have given them a copy.
A blue side? What does tha.. read moreYes, because you are.
I have given them a copy.
A blue side? What does that mean?
Thank you.
12 Years Ago
You're welcome. In a few of my psychology classes a personality test was administered. The results w.. read moreYou're welcome. In a few of my psychology classes a personality test was administered. The results were divided into colors, Blue, Green, Gold and Orange. Each color was given a score. Highest meant which "color" was dominant in your personality. Blues have attributes associated with them like; Empathetic, devoted, poetic, affectionate, inspirational, compassionate and authentic. One of the things that gives a blue self-esteem is helping others. They pride themselves on their empathy, are stressed by being artificial and fake with the people close to them. They strive for love and they are very loyal.
This is in general of course, as there are exceptions to every rule.
I think you have great command of writing for a 15 year old!
My one suggestion: The lines that worked least well for me were "Bruises and cuts heal with time. / Your emotional bruises won't." I felt this because "bruise" is repeated twice, and also "emotional bruise" sounds superficial, shallow, when obviously you mean to refer to deep injury. So I would suggest "emotional wounds".
I love writing haikus.
I don't know if my poems are good. You can read them and see what you think.
There is a short novel/story that is not finished. I'm not sure if I will upload the remaining .. more..