Leaving

I wake up so early to talk.

Even if it's only for a few minutes,

before you have to leave.

The saddest part of my day.

I want to scream, "Stay here with me!"

I don't though.

You live so far away.

With you I want to be, forever.

Eight hours later, you arrive back home.

Sometimes depressed.

Sometimes happy.

It doesn't matter which way, I am happy that you're back.

I always ask you, "Are you mine for the night?"

Most of the time, it's a no.

You have other things to do.

Other friends to be with.

So rarely is it a yes.

When you get back home after an evening with friends,

you seem so happy.

It's late though so you must sleep.

I am sad you have to go.

I am sad you have to sleep.

I am sad you have to say, "Goodbye".

I am sad you have to leave.

Reviews

[AK]

Wow! Amazing poem! I really loved it, Legolas! So humble, so earnest, such a well written plea! I wanted to pick out my favourite line, but I couldn't, just couldn't. Each line is so well written and holds such beauty. Great poem, I loved it! Keep writing!

[Legolas]

Thank you so much! That really means a lot. Thank you so much for all your reviews!

[AK]

Seriously, thank you too for all your reviews! Your works are really interesting and it is my utmost pleasure to review your works!

[Legolas]

You're very welcome! that's very sweet.

[AK]

:)

[Mia]

This is amazing, there is so much emotion in your words without you making them emotional, if that makes sense! The honesty in the simple lines speak volumes. WOW! just WOW!

[Legolas]

Thank you.

[Theartofburning]

I know all about someone leaving,
and waiting..

A fragile write.
Thank you for sharing.

[Legolas]

Thanks.

[Crysta]

Wow, i love this peom, yeah I see that a you can have sadness.

But for me, i will try to look forwards to the optimism to be able to hold him while I sleep... :) however, instead of bye, I always say see you later... and then look towards the waut, where even if he leaves, he returns :) but if he doesn't make more time for you, that may be another thing... although i dont do relationships, if i decided to concern myself with that aspect it would be that..

[Legolas]

I'm a guy... She didn't really make time for me. Thanks for the review.

[Caradoc]

Don't sweat it man. I've had this happen to me before to. Many, many times. Lol.

[Crysta]

ah but its something that can transcend either sex :)

[Legolas]

I'm sorry to hear that Caradoc. I know, I just wanted to tell you.

[Caradoc]

This piece is beautiful and sad. Such an innocent, harmless seeming thing as to leave and come back, to be with friends. And yet sometimes we have an attachment, so strong, that we can't help our thoughts and feelings of "mine". We can't help but one them all for ourselves, if only for a night, if only for a moment.

I wonder, is it so selfish to want someone thus?

Excellent, excellent poem. My favorite line is, "Are you mine for the night?"

It has such power.

-Caradoc

[Legolas]

I was actually talking about my ex-girlfriend. She would always leave. I would cherish the times we could spend all night texting and when I would ask that it was almost always a no.

Thank you for the review.

[Caradoc]

I knew that it had to be about someone that close to you. Believe me, I've known that type of longing.

And you're most welcome for the review.

[Legolas]

Yep.

[Isabelle Faye]

This is a wonderful piece of writing. Each word is emotion-packed and laden with truth. You didn't hide anything in this poem, you laid your emotions out in the open yet you did it so artistically and beautifully that the bare truth is hard to notice as what it is. I told you my reviews sometimes make no sense, I'm sorry. I just wanted to say that I love the poem and you did a wonderful job, congratulations!

[Legolas]

No, they make sense. Thank you very much.

[Owlgirl]

Very relatable and well done poem.

[Legolas]

Thank you

[....]

such a relatable read

[Legolas]

Thanks

[Btwixer]

such an emotional read, nicely done

[Legolas]

Thank you

[Tai Ryens]

Once again, a piece that hits home for me. Especially regarding the beginning of the piece. Well done.

[Legolas]

Thanks alot Tai