Rain

I lie awake in my bed.

Rain pounding the roof.

Thunder shaking the foundation.

Lightning revealing all the faults and insecurities.

 

The ceiling looms above me.

Tears stream down my face.

Through blurry eyes, I see him.

A face looming above me.

 

The face is smiling his usual cruel smile.

The bed sheets are rolled back exposing me.

He slowly undresses me.

Undresses me until I have nothing on.

 

Things are done to me.

Things that scare me even in the daytime.

I am hit repeatedly to make me quiet.

I stop my quiet sobs.

 

I succumb to him.

I cannot fight him.

My body goes limp as he touches me.

After an hour, he leaves

 

There is no one to help.

I am left in my bed.

Covered in wetness.

Tears, blood and secretion.

 

I lie awake.

Cold. Unmoving. Unfeeling.

Horrors go through my head.

A nightmare that will never leave.

 

I finally roll the bed sheets back over me.

I'm encased in stickiness.

There's no point in fighting.

Tomorrow night it will be the same.

 

I close my eyes in my bed.

Rain pounding the roof.

Thunder shaking the foundation.

Lightning revealing all the faults and insecurities.

Reviews

[Nath]

Wow, this one is absolutely amazing!
The vivid description of the horrible events and the ugliness of the scene, perfectly framed by the almost identic first and last stanza that express the unchangability of these and the complete and utter defeat of the sufferer.
Especially the last three lines of mentioned stanza are plainly ingenious. Awesome work!

[Deron Alexis]

The title totally tricked me. The poem was well written the fact that this actually is real for some people is upsetting the last line that is where the madness lives aftermath of doubt, self hate, insecurity crazy stuff keep it up

[Legolas]

Thank you very much. Yes, I felt it needed to be written about.

[Patricia Williams]

Wow. When I saw this while browsing through your writing I was like, "Rain. Cool. Probably another Haiku. I love Rain and Haikus. ^_^ " And then I read it and was like, woah... o_o.

If this happened to you I'm so sorry. :( Truly. Though I cannot even imagine what it is like.

Like everybody already said it's a beautiful poem, well written and the like. But it's so sad. :,(

As always, your word imagery is spot-on; which is important for a poem of this subject matter. You can't just have week words and phrases and still get across the emotions you wish to convey.

I'm currently in a love/hate relationship with this poem. I wonder if that even makes sense. lol :)

[Legolas]

Yeah, the title is deceiving.

It's a tough experience for everyone.

Thank you for the wonderful review. As I've said before, I always love your reviews:)

[Patricia Williams]

Well I love reviewing, so that works out perfectly. :)

[Legolas]

well good:)

[Uroš D. Stojanov..]

Rain can make me feel sad, happy, misguided... it really is an amazing sight. This poem is also amazing, it's descriptive, it's pure... keep at the good work, I love this one.

[Legolas]

Thanks.

[Weeping Willow]

cool, your great at poems

[Legolas]

Thanks.

[Destructive Impulse]

Holy s**t! Please tell me this isnt based on true events.

[Legolas]

Thanks...I guess.

[Destructive Impulse]

So is it?

[Destructive Impulse]

I really hope its not

[Legolas]

Umm...

[Destructive Impulse]

Oh s**t. Im so sorry. I had no idea.

[Speak in Silence]

Wow this is so powerful, I wish you the best of luck :)

[Legolas]

Thanks.

[Speak in Silence]

You're welcome :)

[Tomislav Petricevic]

The punctuation you use really manages to bring up the tense atmosphere of this. Dark images are painted perfectly by your words.
An outstanding job, man!

[Legolas]

Thank you very much.

[Owlgirl]

This is intense, very well done, it's amazing how the honesty within it and raw emotions flow so easily off the page. I love it! Into the library it goes!

[Legolas]

Thank you so much!

[Owlgirl]

Your welcome, it truly is excellent!

[Legolas]

Thanks!

[Cole Hayley]

beautiful bro, a great piece. I love the ending, "revealing all the faults and insecurities", the closing by return is perfect here