Invisible

How I feel

He walks to school.

Alone in a crowded world.

Class to class he walks.

No one seeing him.

No one caring at all.

 

Terrible thoughts bounce in his head.

Thoughts of worthlessness and misery.

Thoughts of sadness and loneliness.

Thoughts of suicide and death.

Surrounded by the shadows.

 

In class, no one talks to him.

No one bothers to say 'hello'.

No one bothers to ask how he's doing.

No one cares.

It's like no one can see him.

 

To the world, he is invisible.

Reviews

[Patricia Williams]

:(
sadsadsad. I wish I knew all the people going through this at my school. I try to say 'hello' to people and ask how they're doing. But sometimes it's hard because I'm having a rotten day myself.

I wish no one had to go through this.
This is something I feel pretty strongly about. No one should have to suffer. >:'( NO. ONE.

In other news - well written. I like the second stanzas rhythm. Also how you wrapped it up with the title and all in the last line :)
Good job. Keep Writing. I can't wait to read more. :)

[Legolas]

I know. I wish I said hello to people but being very shy myself, I don't.

Thank you for the review!

[Patricia Williams]

My pleasure!

[Tai Ryens]

You've done a fine job exposing the emotions you hold within. I know the feeling well, you aren't alone buddy. Great job.

[Legolas]

Thank you guys for your reviews! It means alot:) Im sorry isabelle that you feel invisible. You wont be invisible to me though:)

[Nath]

Very good poem! It really manages to grasp the feeling of being unseen, unnoticed and, what seems most likely then, not loved or cared for.
That kind of loneliness is never healthy, it leaves too much leisure for the mind to come up with unhealthy thoughts, such as those you mention.
I really like the way you wrote this, the short, concise sentences, the repetitions... it just feels very fitting.
I think you did awesome, keep up the great work!

[Isabelle Faye]

Wow! What a powerful poem. Replace the he with a she and you basicly described me. The way you wrote the poem is wonderful and the first stanza draws you in. The way you said "alone in a crowed world" creates a vivid image in my head. I really like the poem.
~Isabelle