The Oak

Bright sun at the half

strengthens the weary Oak tree

from wilting at the root

Reviews

[Summer D.]

Sometimes it's not so much about how well you "hid the meaning". I think I overdo it here and there when I write– Not everyone can follow my train of thought. Beautiful imagery. Simple but elegant.

Nature is always a plentiful source of imagery.

Dark poison that seeps
Withers the weakened
From the root to leaves.

Good job.

[Legolas]

Thank you. Wow. Great haiku. Way better then anything I've written.

[Summer D.]

It was pretty horrible honestly but thank you so much, love :)
Don't sell your self short.
read moreIt was pretty horrible honestly but thank you so much, love :)
Don't sell your self short.
I really liked this~!

Keep writing. :)

[Legolas]

Well I loved it:)
thanks.
I will!

[Summer D.]

Also, hehe. It wasn't a haiku. I forgot about the 7 syllables on the second line.

[Legolas]

Oh yes. I didn't even bother counting syllables since I thought it was a haiku.

[Chloe]

Extra syllable
In the ending of your poem
Sorry to say so

Great work, excepting the extra syllable. :)

[Legolas]

Oh no! I didn't see that! Sorry.

[C.A. Lucas]

Oh, another one. I like this one better, though. Despite it's length, it makes me feel happy inside :)

[Legolas]

Thanks.

[Caradoc]

Indeed. This has a very strong truth in the metaphor. We, every one of us, needs that bright sunlight to strengthen us and prevent us from wilting.

Short but strong. You're pretty good at Haiku.

-Caradoc

[Legolas]

Thanks.

[Isabelle Faye]

This is just a guess and it could be completely wrong, but, is this by any chance related to "My Sun"? As I said, it could be wrong but this haiku reminded me of that very strongly. I love the image that your words create, it is one of your many strengths, you create vivid, sharp images with your words. I can almost see the sun's rays reaching down and caressing the world-weary Oak tree, whispering words of comfort and warmth to it, letting it know what a strong, amazing tree it is and how much the sun admires how hard it tries to keep growing even as wilt eats at it's roots, severing its hold on life. I can see the sun's rays trying to save those ties, breath new life and hope into the Oak tree. I really do love this haiku, it is masterfully done with not a single word wasted. Amazing job!

[Legolas]

It is related to it somewhat. It has the same idea. Thank you so much. That truly means a lot. Thank you. It feels so good to hear that.

[Isabelle Faye]

Ah, okay. That makes sense. It's all true.

[Legolas]

Yeah. Thank you so much.

[Isabelle Faye]

You're welcome.

[Pax]

your great at haiku, you should keep writing.
its has a lot of hidden message to thing off.
good job

[Legolas]

Thank you. I've written a lot more.

[AK]

Wow! Another brilliant poem:) I love the way this poem creates an image in my mind, of a huge green garden with a large oak tree and the shining sun. Great poem, with a deep and powerful meaning, probably to show that the oak is a person who is getting strength from a source of light for them and wilting at the root probably means from falling down or even dying? Keep writing!

[Legolas]

Thank you so much. Yes you got it about 95% right. Good job! it's not really a 'deep' meaning. I am willing to guess it didn't take that long to figure out.

[AK]

Yeah, it's actually not deep, but hey I would hate to call it 'the shallow meaning' lol:)

[Legolas]

Yeah...

[Kaylor Mason]

Nice. I never could do haikus very well

[Legolas]

Thanks.