A way out

Something for a contest.

Desperate, searching for a way out of his lonely life, wanting the pain to end.

Reviews

[AK]

So short, so short, only a single sentence and yet it has this effect on me. It has this aura of desolation and sorrow. I could imagine a boy struggling with a heavy burfpden on his back, tears streaming down his face, wanting, waiting and hoping that the burden will be removed and he will be spared. I loved this piece. Keep writing!

[Legolas]

Thank you very much. Yes, that is the kind of boy I had in mind. I am glad I was able to make the boy so real to you. Thanks, I will.

[AK]

(:

[Brielle Cartny]

We can find a way out of the suffering and we don't have to leave this life to escape. I know because i have done it. I know exactly how you feel, but i found a solution that saved my life.

[Legolas]

I am glad you found a solution.

[Deeper La'jik]

emotional intelligence captured in one sentence..true expression

[Legolas]

Thanks.

[Freedom's Child]

The greatest thing about really short poems like this is it keeps the imagination grasping at more the mind just continues on. Great emotion for one and a great at still getting the reader involved. Nice work!

[Legolas]

Thank you.

[TLK]

Typing, pressing the keys in ordered succession, waiting for the full stop to arrive.

[Legolas]

Ok...

[Caradoc]

I remember this pain so well.

This short piece conveys such strong meaning. It's charged with powerful emotion, a story waiting to be told, begging to be known, so that the loneliness will end.

It always amazes me how the human experience is shared, even though our lives, in the end, are singular. A poet in pain can write something beautiful and heartrending, completely unaware that they just put into words the terrible situation of another halfway across the world.

For if nothing else, in our loneliness and pain, we are one.

Great job. What contest was this for?

[Legolas]

Thank you for your words.

That third paragraph (if you can call the first the one with only one line) is very true.
Thank you.
It was one that you had to write only one line.

[Caradoc]

You're most welcome. I thought it might be.

[Sky]

Pain is torcherous and can lead into desperate times. Well done.

[Legolas]

Thanks.

[Dean Kuch®]

Raw, intense and emotionally driven. Exactly what a short piece should be.
Well done...

[Legolas]

Thanks very much.

[Dean Kuch®]

Sure. I always enjoy reading your stuff. Very powerful...

[Legolas]

Thank you very very much. Tonight I am going to review some more of your works.

[Dean Kuch®]

Thanks. Some reflect the darker side. We can't see the light unless we've waded through the darkness.
I appreciate all of your feed back...

[Legolas]

You're welcome.

[Tai Ryens]

Long periods of intense desperation packed tight into one mere line. Well done indeed.

[Legolas]

Thank you.

[Rose of Gondor]

Is this a haiku? Just wondering. :D A few words that speak oceans. Do you like Tolkien too?

[Legolas]

No, its a one liner that I wrote for a contest. Thanks. I love Tolkien.

[Rose of Gondor]

I do too. Sorry, that last comment was completely random in relevation to this poem, but I couldn't resist, with your handle being Legolas....

[Legolas]

I am the biggest LOTR fan you'll ever meet.

[Rose of Gondor]

Somehow, I'm not surprised. Favorite character?

[Legolas]

Legolas of course.

[Rose of Gondor]

again, not surprised with that handle! I Love LOTR. You can say I'm slightly obsessed (ok, more than slightly....)

[Legolas]

That's cool. I am obsessed with it. You should see my room.

[Rose of Gondor]

Haha, I haven't redecorated my room yet, but I shall, soon!

[Legolas]

That's fun.

[Rose of Gondor]

As soon as I get those interior design lessons!

[Legolas]

haha. Just do what feels right.

[Rose of Gondor]

True....I don't know whether paint my walls blue or get blue hazy lights...

[Legolas]

I know what I would do but it has to be your choice.

[Rose of Gondor]

:D Yep! Cause I don't plan on moving out of that room for the next ten years!

[Legolas]

I see. You better think carefully then.

[Rose of Gondor]

Yep!