Manster

My contribution for Halloween '08 as well as for all those with the cutting dilemma. From my own observations, true horror lies within not without.

 

Manster

 

 

 

Sleeping with the enemy

in a single bed,

Tossing and turning

from the thoughts in his head.

Images twisted

of past recognition

Fills what he feels

deep with trepidation.

Knowing full well

these visions are sordid.

Lose of control,

his actions are horrid.

Slashes and cuts,

deep how they bled.

A ravenous pain

that must be fed.

His hunger consumes

all that he is.

A blade nestles tightly

within a grip that is his.

The victim rages silently,

lost within insanity.

His arms are littered

with debris of the past.

He winces, though indifferent,

as the knife slices fast.

Etched within flesh,

the heiroglyphs of his humanity

A map defined definitively.

A man disturbed deeply.

 

 

Legion

18Oct08

Reviews

[Sean M. Addams]

i like the darkness in this piece and the imagery and flow of this piece were very good... overall a very nicely written piece of dark poetry that fits perfectly in the halloween season:) fav lines...The victim rages silently,

lost within insanity.

His arms are littered

with debris of the past.

He winces, though indifferent,

as the knife slices fast.

Etched within flesh,

the heiroglyphs of his humanity

A map defined definitively.

A man disturbed deeply.

[DaWonAndOnli]

I really liked this piece. You can feel the cry for help in each line. Thank You for this one.

[Deanarrlack]

I enjoyed this piece. The power brought on by the simplicity in its words was quite good. Much I can relate too.

[Adrian K. Smith]

The duality of this work captures well that horror of being both predator and prey to oneself. You can picture the almost silent pleas and cries for it to stop, and you can picture the deaf ear that ignores them. The horror hits us from the start, and it does not stop. There is no surprise shock nor twist. This is not a "boo" piece. This is an "oh s**t" piece. It is one of those, oh God, I want to stop reading... but I cannot... much like the cries of the person cutting themselves... oh God, I want to stop cutting... but I cannot....

[Philosophile. (Maddy)]

Great flow with this! I love how you portray the man's worst enemy as himself, so true. Also, this reminds me of my own close relationship with that familiar blade. My favorite lines are: "Etched within flesh,
the heiroglyphs of his humanity
A map defined definitively."
Those old lines scream, "I'm alive."

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Very spooky and deeply tragic! Yes, oft times the true enemy lies within.

Completely captured and portrayed with nightmarish imagery that renders the reader breathless.

Good work!

[Wildfleour]

Yikes!

[Emily B]

This is chilling. Dark enough for Halloween.

[Jane Doe]

Absolutely amazing. I struggle with the cutting dilemma and have way too many scars to prove it. Such a provocative, poignant way of describing this phenomena. I really enjoyed it, it's going into my favs.