Manster

My contribution for Halloween '08 as well as for all those with the cutting dilemma. From my own observations, true horror lies within not without.

 

Manster

 

 

 

Sleeping with the enemy

in a single bed,

Tossing and turning

from the thoughts in his head.

Images twisted

of past recognition

Fills what he feels

deep with trepidation.

Knowing full well

these visions are sordid.

Lose of control,

his actions are horrid.

Slashes and cuts,

deep how they bled.

A ravenous pain

that must be fed.

His hunger consumes

all that he is.

A blade nestles tightly

within a grip that is his.

The victim rages silently,

lost within insanity.

His arms are littered

with debris of the past.

He winces, though indifferent,

as the knife slices fast.

Etched within flesh,

the heiroglyphs of his humanity

A map defined definitively.

A man disturbed deeply.

 

 

Legion

18Oct08

Reviews

[Sean M. Addams]

i like the darkness in this piece and the imagery and flow of this piece were very good... overall a very nicely written piece of dark poetry that fits perfectly in the halloween season:) fav lines...The victim rages silently,

lost within insanity.

His arms are littered

with debris of the past.

He winces, though indifferent,

as the knife slices fast.

Etched within flesh,

the heiroglyphs of his humanity

A map defined definitively.

A man disturbed deeply.

[SunshineLaser]

WOW, THIS IS GREAT WRITING. I can tell because the beginning makes no conceivable sense with the end.

[Shugotenshi1692]

dark.... you weave in reality though. i admire that.

[charleybear]

very dark and very deep> A subject close to my heart, very well written. it is all consuming and there is no escape. I liked it. your words almost like the knife, in the sense they cut deep. Well done

[J.Black]

Oh the darkness! On the edge of my seat the whole journey through.

[octane143]

Very dark piece, but a subject that people seem to shy away from. It is insanity, you captured that perfectly! Self-mutilation has a tendency to quench the emotional pain, phyical pain overides it. It's refreshing to see someone write about it, and though it's dark it's very beautiful! The flow and imagery are womderful, as one comes to expect from reading your work.

[I C S Clark-Hogg]

Oooeeer, very dark and disturbing. This is definately one for Halloween.
Irene

[Jeremiah Medina]

I like the insanity.. He winces, though indifferent, as the knife slices fast. Etched within flesh, the heiroglyphs of his humanity.... Dark and disturbing my kind of writing...Its a good one most definately.

[LSS]

I agree with you about the need to bring imaginations back down to earth, where the scariest of all horrors live. Thank you again.
Lar

[Pamela A. Lamppa]

I will say, those last two lines are definitive of this piece and carry the message straight home. A great piece for Halloween, but for anytime when the horrors become more that one can handle. Nicely done. ~Pamela

[Windy]

Cutting has become another "cry for help", at least it seems that way to me. There are so many people doing this to themselves and it is so sad. This write was full of pain and saddness as well as rage. For a person to do physical harm to themselves and not be able to stop must be excrutiating for them and for those that care about them. Being your own worst enemy, how terrifing that must be. "Sleeping with the enemy, trepidation, loss of control, horrid actions, ravenous pain, raging silently" yet to do it again and again...how very painful and sad. Very well written and on a subject that needs attention brought to it. Bravo.