Fathering America

Something I wrote years ago about my grandfather (after his death) and his generation. How things and ideals have changed of late. :(

Fathering America

 

 

  A vision

Acquiring velocity

  Drives

  The dominion onward

To raise the dream

Into a

      Conscious reality.

 

  A motion

Mastered in the mind,

  Compels

  The hands to create;

To endeavor

The course

      To the end.

 

  The seed,

Germinated in the soul,

  Struggles to survive

  And thrive

On the knowledge

And salvation

  That the hands

  Have conformed

To create

  A sanctuary

  For the ones to come

From those that have gone before.

 

      In those hands,

        The fathering of America.

 

Legion

8Dec97

Reviews

[Adrian K. Smith]

Before I touch upon this touching piece of remembrance of the time before things became as they are, I wanted to say I disagree with the mention of politicians offered in one of the other reviews. No, a single person can generally not go out there and change the world; but before casting stones and pointing fingers - one has to ask what they have done in their little part of the world... personally, I have not done crap - so I will not complain about it... :)

This is a painful piece to read, as it is very clear and it should be evident to all of us how we have been failed by our parents and how we are failing our children - knowing that without putting an end to this change in behavior, it will never stop until it is far too late. There is a humble flow to this piece, that catches well the humility that was felt even as the pride was felt by our forefathers. Now we simply seek the pride of all that unnecessary bling, that lovely ladies with too much backside will of our epic feats sing, until that moment when our 15 minutes of fame causes that final bell to ring...

...we can do what we can, nothing more, but if we do not do that... if we do not do that...

[Kathryn Star, Shine!]

Wow, I'm impressed! I liked the way you lined up the wording, I loved the rhyme and enjoyed the read. I think I'm in for the night... but thanks for letting me know about your writing.

[Gandré]

This is an excellent piece about proud history and meaning, touching patriotism and the first America poem on this site I really loved.

[Windy]

In defense, I must say there are still those that "Have conformed To create A sanctuary For the ones to come" There are still hands of love "fathering", maybe not as many as we would like but they are out there. Other than that, this is a very "deep" writing which I am truthfully not able to review well as I am not exactly "clear" on some of the meanings and would not want to do your poem any injustice. Maybe I am an optimist as I for one see on a daily basis a man that the "seeds" that were planted did germinate and have carried on to make him a very loving, caring, nurturing father (and even more so) grandfather which in turn will hopefully take seed within his children and grandchildren and continue on. I can only hope that if there is One, there are more... Well written, very moving piece.

[Wildecat]

Legion first of all thanks for the kind review of Stanley The Skunk and you're right Pigs need loving too. I grew up on a farm so can relate to pigs. Just read your poem, Fathering America an excellent poem, a definite pleasure to read.

[Helen Woodward]

Scary huh? Now you need to spell it out to those who do have our lives in their hands...The Politicians!!!
A very insightful piece...God I wish I knew your name piglet! It is likeI'm speaking to a spectre??????????
Helen :-)