Theory of the Human

Another old one found. This was actually going to be the intro to a graphic novel that I was going to work on with an artist friend of mine back in high school, but after we graduated we went our seperate ways.

Theory of the Human

 

 

Man is but a pebble

Cast into the

Garden of Eden,

Causing ripples.

 

Shattering Paradise!

 

Legion

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Reviews

[Gandré]

Dostojewski said, politics promising to offer a final solution to ensure happiness would deprive us of our humanity; the islamic philosophy before Mohammed says, all that we have to do to conceive of God is miraculously creating something out of nothing and to imagine it happening, (said Ibn Rushd). and I love this theory, I also believe the universe is self-organized and self-explaining and that everything is intelligent. This poem was succinct, reduced in execution but has a strong appeal. loved it.

[Aspiring Angel]

I always so admire someone that can relay so much with so few lines. I think that you should pick this up where you thought first of taking it. I hope that your week is going well.

Blessings,
Lesa

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I would love to see you bring this graphic novel into fruition even if the idea is 20+ years old. Ideas never die and this is a brilliant, thought-provoking stanza. It speaks volumes. Even then you were talented.

[octane143]

So thought provoking in so few words! Now I'm thinking...(thanks alot!)

[Don Coorough]

I get something different from what some others wrote about in their reviews. I do not think this is a literal device about Adam and Eve from Genesis - if so, where are all the other players? I see Adam as a symbol of all humanity. The ripples being the works of humans. The finale lets us see that all the works of humans (in the physical world - because the poem seems to be about physical reality to me) do nothing but deface and destroy nature, and ourselves in the process. Very nice metaphor! - EllisD

[LadyLove]

Short and meaningful...and I see a fleeting glimpse of all the history of mankind's horrors pass before my eyes like a film to support the regret of that one pebble. Still...we each can hope to find our own paradise within those ripples. At least the ripples you extend to others brings smiles and happy moments as well. Take care!

[Tai Chi Italy]

lol you got him in one hell of a poem Legion!!lol Great work by one hell of a poet, smiling at you, Tai

[Larissa G.]

Short and yet so incredibly strong and descriptive without being a long sentence.
I like this, a lot.
Well done and thank you for sharing. :)

[Kena Dawn Augustine]

Very nice. Short, but you can expound on it in so many ways, on so many different levels.

The idea I get from it is that since the fall of Adam, it has caused a ripple effect, because since this man has been carnal, and devilish, and we still remain that way. In the flesh, not the spirit.

Before humans were born, after him, they did live in a state of paradie! wild animals were tame. They could kick it with lions and it was beautiful! So, they did shatter it.

But hey.....good news! It will be a state of paradise after this life, much later, and everything will be brought back to its state of glory. anyway, don't want to expound on all this religious stuff, but just the truth:

This poem was good, because it sparked thoughts in my head. And it's always nice to write something that captures us. You did this. thanks.

kena

[Rc R. Vagilidad]

my!! such vivid write. love the significance of a particular insignificant spec to cause such desolation, so profound theme.... epic! hope you did a wonderful picture out of this. refer to my photos, u will see the captioned pics "adam tamed the snake"... its my work at deviantart.com...

love this write, and the theme!!!