Love As A Weed

It's not always a good thing.

Love As A Weed

 

 

A tendril of thought penetrates the darkness

     collecting memory for the reminisce of heartache.

A wisp of a word perpetrates meaning,

     Perpetuating wasted wanting.

A strand of a story unfurls grasping for relevance.

     Reaching for understanding, it clings to longing.

A thread of a tale, twined and textured,

     connecting desperation with disparity.

 

Legion

28June08

Author's Note

Not what I intended with this when I started writing it a few minutes ago. But this is what happened. From what I can tell it has to do with the idea that love isn't always a good thing. For instance, when it is one sided and will never be returned by the other. Might add more to this later. Or delete it altogether depending on the reviews on it.

Reviews

[Orlando Murcia]

I will tell you one thing bud, that it is true when some will not return the love but for some cases
you just have to understand that it's not always what you want that you get
but want you dont want is was you need, I never wanted to be with my best friend, now we are getting married next month. I understand what you mean though. This was a great poem especially that you were not afraid to show it. Great job! Orlando M

[LadyLove]

Complex words are just the thing to do justice in expressing the complex feelings of the heart. Sometimes quite hard to explain what you search for in love or when you think you have it,or to convey its meaning to another. You yourself may know...but to tell it...hard as an elephant's toenail! Don't delete.

[Tabitha Dings]

That is an excellent poem. Short sweet and to the point. Very elegant at that. I wish I could write like that. I have troubles with poems. I can write a good story and a book (even though I'm a little lazy about proof reading) But poems. Well I certainly envy you. Good job. I like this one a lot. I believe I said that before. But anyway. I need to stop chatting up a storm. But don't delete this. Please.

[Emily Rose]

Don't delete it; it says so much with so little, and that's a true talent in poetry. Sometimes I think its wording is a bit complex for what it's trying to say, but that's actually a really nice touch: the words are like tendrils in themselves. It's an interesting view on love and you executed it quite well. Good job!

[Jane Doe]

'A wisp of a word perpetrates meaning,

Perpetuating wasted wanting.'

I particularly love those lines, though I enjoyed the entire piece. A short, sweet, wonderful poem.

[Fabian G. Franklin]

ah, i like this. desperate little weed climbing toward the sun, seeking the light and water of life, just natural.

[Annelise]

ha, i revised it like 20 seconds after you reviewed. Thanks for that, btw.

[Annelise]

"A thread of a tale, twined and textured,
connecting desperation with disparity."

This was a great line. I love the brevity of the poem, yet it still had deep emotion. That can be a very difficult thing to accomplish.

[Jeremiah Medina]

This is a very sad depiction of love... i like it.... love isnt always good nor is it always happy and filled with good times...theres lots of heart ache and pretty much every single emotion you can feel...i shared with this other person and not all of them our good infact most arent .... and it really makes you think is it worth it at all?....are the good times better than the bad....is this person willing to deal with you and are you willing to deal with them...and im babbling ill just shut up now....anywho nice write and later....

[Antony]

I read this as love being almost impossible to rid ourselves of, should we fall hard, we become desperate as we pour our hearts out to that certain individual, weeds are very hard to get rid off, I usually use my weed wacker, but that is only a temporary solution. I admire how you wrote this. It needs nothing more or less.
Tony

[Gaiamethod]

God that is sadly hopeless. I can feel that in my stomach. That's why I like your work so much. It makes me FEEL! And, I guess we feel it because we know it........
Leave it where it is!