Love As A Weed

It's not always a good thing.

Love As A Weed

 

 

A tendril of thought penetrates the darkness

     collecting memory for the reminisce of heartache.

A wisp of a word perpetrates meaning,

     Perpetuating wasted wanting.

A strand of a story unfurls grasping for relevance.

     Reaching for understanding, it clings to longing.

A thread of a tale, twined and textured,

     connecting desperation with disparity.

 

Legion

28June08

Author's Note

Not what I intended with this when I started writing it a few minutes ago. But this is what happened. From what I can tell it has to do with the idea that love isn't always a good thing. For instance, when it is one sided and will never be returned by the other. Might add more to this later. Or delete it altogether depending on the reviews on it.

Reviews

[Orlando Murcia]

I will tell you one thing bud, that it is true when some will not return the love but for some cases
you just have to understand that it's not always what you want that you get
but want you dont want is was you need, I never wanted to be with my best friend, now we are getting married next month. I understand what you mean though. This was a great poem especially that you were not afraid to show it. Great job! Orlando M

[Angel's Lady]

collecting memory for the reminisce of heartache - Wow, very powerful statement. Great job here.
Very nicely done.

[Adrian K. Smith]

We classify some plants as weeds, because we feel that they destroy what we are otherwise trying to grow or they do not quite fit the look we were going for... or was I talking about love?

[Nicole Marie]

So relatable, so fresh. I never thought about how love is a weed-- how it grows and tangles and constricts. The alliteration caught my eye. I love to read it aloud. Do not delete it. It's full of so much truth. And I think it is beautiful.

[LSS]

James,
As I've seen from your reviews, you have alot of admirers of good work. Well done. Personally I especially appreciate someone who can use words correctly and is not afraid of the big ones. Most of our English language contains alot of words that can better express what we want to say if we just had a handle on them or a knowledge of them. You are very capable and confident as you write. Your expressions and your metaphor using plants and weeds is penetrating and gets the point of your poem across.
Lar

[fireblossom]

This place has the same effect on me....!

The picture unfolds in the poem.

Nice.

[Flow]

why would you delete it? I like it as is, the message is strong and shows the other side of love~

[Leah Simone]

the alliteration was a tongue tickler for sure. I got so caught up in the sound of the words - I had to read again for meaning and I simply found interconnectedness of life - how everything is linked.

[TamiViolet]

Exceptional writing, Legion. Word choice creates darkness and depth. Yes, the notion of love isn't always a good thing, especially when it accompanies hurt and regret. I have learned to view lost love as a lesson and attempt
to gain strength and insight from its unfortunate pangs...

Into my favorites...
XXX

[Adam Chambers]

A tendril of thought
A strand of a story unfurls
A thread of a tale, twined and textured
...THESE ARE ALL GOOD IMAGES THAT RELATE BACK TO THE TITLE I CAN SEE...
Perpetuating wasted wanting
...LIKE THE FLOW AND RYTHM OF THIS LINE...
OVERALL, I THINK YOU'VE GOT A GOOD IMAGE AND THEME TO WORK WITH HERE; FROM YOUR NOTE ABOVE, IT SOUNDS LIKE YOU STUMBLED ACROSS IT,AND THAT CAN BE A GREAT PLACE TO WRITE FROM (BEING 'SURPRISED' BY YOURSELF, KIND OF...); I WOULD SAY ONLY TO EXPAND UPON THE IMAGES A LITTLE MORE IN THIS ONE, AND MAYBE FINE TUNE SOME OF THE OTHER WORDING, SUCH AS:
reaching for understanding, it clings to longing, ETC.
(I UNDERSTAND WHAT YOU'RE TRYING TO DO HERE;; 'CLING' ETC.; JUST MAYBE FINE TUNE IT TO MAKE IT MORE POWERFUL; THAT'S JUST ONE EXAMPLE...)
HOPE THIS HELPS!
ADAM