This Achilles' Heart

This Achilles' Heart

A Poem by Legion
"

A haiku of the weak side of love.

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This Achilles' Heart

 

 

Baptized within you.

Myself given to weakness,

This Achilles' heart.

 

 

Legion

05Jun08

© 2008 Legion


Author's Note

Legion
May change this. Working on different versions of this. Not sure which one I will end up with eventually.

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beautiful piece legion... I love the vunerability... I think that the simplicity adds to the feeling... it's perfect. Sometimes simplicity is best... it's so easy to lose the true depth of feeling or emotion of something with complicated imagery. Great call... truly expressive without being pretentious.

Posted 16 Years Ago


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No, dont change it. I love it, the weak spot of a lover is the heart just like the weak spot of the mightiest warrior was his heel. rich.

Posted 16 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

i love, love this version. I would say keep this version, but I havent read the others yet. great stuff!

Posted 16 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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Nowhere near a BBQ pit!



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