100 Monkeys

Sometimes I feel like a monkey banging at the keys. Sometimes I feel like Shakespeare mastering his quill. Either way, words scatter across the page.

100 Monkeys

 

 

100 monkeys

Manning their machines.

Typing out Shakespeare

Or something more obscene.

Key strokes painting

Pictures out of words.

Waxing so poetic

Or spewing thoughts absurd.

 

Philosophical pondering

Or pandering to posturing.

Prose of importance

Or parables in pretense.

 

100 monkeys

Creating quite a feat.

Mastering Shakespeare,

Chaucer, Poe, and Keats.

Simian words of wisdom,

Thoughts for us to read.

When will we learn their lessons

That we fail to heed?

 

Legion

10May08

Author's Note

May add or change this later. Not sure about that last stanza. What do you think?

Reviews

[Bill Grimes Jr.]

"Philosophical pondering

Or pandering to posturing.

Prose of importance

Or parables in pretense."

What a powerful statement my friend. This work warrants a read over and over to soak it all in......Excellent poetry indeed. A prospect for a song as well........

Peace,

Bill

[DaniElle LaPointe]

Nice alliteration to add smoothness. Although I think the monkey allegory is a tad limmerick. Your subject is laughable but uneasy in a community of writers... but perhaps you meant to touch that nerve... Nicely done.

Philosophical pondering

Or pandering to posturing.

Prose of importance

Or parables in pretense.

[April Child]

I like it although I did trip up a little on those last 2 lines, they both seem to say the same thing. Wonder if they might work better combined as one line "Lessons we fail to heed". Other than that it's a tight piece with subtle rhymes which don't seem contrived and it paints a good picture in the mind.

[Druscilla Morgan]

I love this!!

"Key strokes painting
Pictures out of words.
Waxing so poetic
Or spewing thoughts absurd."

....great use of imagery and humour. I love the last stanza...perhaps the very last line needs a word added to keep the tempo?? but I think this poem has wonderful character and impact :-))

[poetaster]

hmm, i knew i liked this piece as soon as i read the first stanza. great job! usually i think rhyming can be really stilted, and it's pretty hard to pull off, so i usually don't, but here you definitely did it well.

good twist on the infinite apes with infinite time concept. the rhyming allusions are nice too. i agree about the last stanza, though. there isn't really enough setup for the last two lines.

but nice way to express the sometimes frustrating, always mercurial nature of writing.

[Enigmatic Amor]

I agree with the others. The middle stanza is powerful. I think you're right, the last stanza needs work. Not sure how though. Big help, I am!

I think the last stanza tends to narrow the meaning too much. If you left it more vague the multiple meanings of the first stanza would continue to ruminate...or is it resonate?

[Cassandra]

This was a great. Love the image of monkeys just hammering away all those important beautiful thoughts that might go unrecognized. .. I sometimes feel this way.. like we're just padding along life .. numb to everything just living and not thriving or taking it all in. I liked that last stanza personally. I liked it all.

[Jacquelene Vanessa More..]

Philosophical pondering

Or pandering to posturing.

Prose of importance

Or parables in pretense.

this is my faveorite stanza to read. great use of alliteration good play on words. i enjoy your word choice it gives the poem so much more. no roses are red and the grass is green. FILLED WITH COMPLEXITY,. I LOOOOVE IT

[BLFK]

It made me smile- the use of rhyming. I really enjoyed it. It's just . . . p-e-r-f-e-c-t.
And thank you for reviewing "His Feet". I appreciated your comment. Thank you.
BLFK

[Buddy]

I like this a lot. The flow and rhyme was good until the very last line,

"That we fail to heed." Maybe put the emphasis on the word "That". Other than that, great job :) I'm glad you enjoyed my little ditty 'When Pigs Fly', when I read your review of my effort 'Wind Borne', my pen just flowed. Thanks for the idea. Enjoy, Buddy.

[Grace Steinbach]

This is so abstract and beautiful. I love the last stanza-keep it.
I feel '100 Monkeys' describes the plight of the writer...sometimes we feel like brilliant poets,
then other times we feel like primates with a pen.
It's a very strong piece.
Kudos!