The Law of Attraction

A piece about how people and things are pulled together. Gravity. Attraction. Whatever the reason.

The Law of Attraction

 

 

The law of attraction.

Gravitation pulls
Found bound in shadows,

Defined in darkness I find

A struggle for direction, a stand.

Being bent to your will,

But will I break you with mine?

Stamina beaten down

Within a captured destiny

Abashed by a controlled dignity.

Hidden within,

Kept in check,

Not found in vowels
(the u and the i)

But in a number

(the one).

Expressing the equation

Of a common denominator

Left off the page

But lifted to life.

 

 

Rules written to follow,

Broken or not.

 

 

Legion

26Apr08

Reviews

[JC]

I found this quite an interesting piece. I have to agree with Rain about the flow. In the middle, I think you either need to go with giving the vowels as part of the stanza instead of making them as a subtitle, or eliminate them altogether.

"Stamina beaten down" ... definately my favorite line. It reminds of giving up trying to fight the inevitable.

Kudos!
JC

[Rain]

This is a very interesting, intricate poem. Very unique, and very well written. I hate the word "flow" but it has a smoothness that is best described as flow. Excellent write. Rain..

[Lindsay.]

Oh wow.

I absolutely LOVED this poem.
The flow was nice and I loved how you incorporated science into this poem.