Ode to a Bug

Ode to a Bug

 

Poor bug

Drowned.

At the bottom

It was found.

A short life

Shorter made

In this glass

Of lemonade.

I wondered of its dying thoughts

Or if it truly thinks.

Wish I'd found it sooner,

Before I'd finished my drink.

 

 

Legion

12APR08

Reviews

[Clockwork]

I like the overall irony with the bug's final destination being the drinkers mouth. It is an enjoyable piece with a nice dose of wit. My favorite lines were "Wish I'd found it sooner, /Before I'd finished my drink."

I would say that I felt line 10 was a bit rough overall. You set up that great thought about what was going through the bugs mind in line nine, but the flow is a bit off.

[radian7]

This is great.... funny. Two associations come to mind. I think of James Thurber for some reason and then I think of the Who's song Boris the Spider where the author of the song is much less compassionate the the author of Ode to a Bug. Must say that after reading your darker pieces this one is quick to bring a smile. A fave.

Very funny! I had to read this because my house is being over run with ants! This is funny! Made me stop to think for just a split second before I killed the ant on my leg! Great poem!

[Toni Prehoda Kahler]

This twists me with two reactions: One, I sorta smile because I have found bugs in my liquids, because the rhymes are light, but it takes me further because I, too, have considered wether the tiny life-forms desire to live....I like pausing agian to consider it....

[brita]

I liked this one. It was short and sweet and very cute.
I think we all, at some point, try to imagine what a bug's life and death would be like. I know I certainly do!

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This is great I really liked it! Its fun.

[Kitty]

LOL Very nice.

[Tamme]

Poor bug... He probably thought he found nirvana only to die in the wonderful sweetness. I am sure his last moments were happy ones. LOL This was really cute.

[MerelyPoetic]

this is frickin' great! Poor bug didn't even get any Lemon Bicardi to drown his dying soul. If bugs have souls. : ) Love this!

[SM Davis]

CUTE!!!!!!!!! Very well done. Oh goodness me! How many glasses of lemonade have we consumed without a thought to the bug! LOL Well done! 100 daisies.

[R J Askew]

I enjoyed this...my face cracked on the word 'lemonade'. I sometimes talk to my daughter's rabbit...and then end up feeling utterly lonely as a human being, because who the hell writes poems about us when we are in the lemonade!

by the way your poem reminded me of when I was sat in the garden late one summer's night, put my wine glass down, picked it up again a minute later...paused for some reason and looked at it...to see a wasp was swirming (could actually be a combo of swarm/squirm and swim!) around in there. I wince to this day at the thought of drinking the wasp!