When I Knew Everything
A Poem by
Legion
A song I wrote not too long ago. Not sure if I like it or not.
When I Knew Everything
Take my beating heart from me
So I may bleed no more.
Stop this insane intensity
And let me feel no more.
End this antagonistic agony.
Falling tears no more.
Destroy my pride and dignity
For which I need no more.
Chorus:
Back when I knew everything
So many things
Slipped through my fingers.
Back when I knew everything
I never saw you
But now you linger
Within my mind.
Within my soul.
Within my heart.
You've gained control.
Time is borrowed.
I live the day
For your return,
To come back my way.
Take this lack of light from me
So the shadows will grow no more.
Instill within an integrity
Finding strength to falter no more.
Bury all my hypocrisy
And I'll hold judgement no more.
Lend love legitimacy
And my lust will prevail no more.
Chorus: (repeat)
Living within your eyes,
Finally I realize
All things that I knew
Mean nothing without you.
Chorus: (repeat)
Legion
23Mar07
© 2008 Legion
Reviews
i love this! especially the last stanza. it's so beautiful, kinda like a plea or an apology. it also has a great rhythm
Posted 16 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
Hmm, this wasn't bad, the lines I thought were the best were..."Take this lack of light from me"
"So the shadows will grow no more."
"Instill within an integrity"
"Finding strength to falter no more."
"Bury all my hypocrisy"
"And I'll hold judgement no more."
"Lend love legitimacy"
"And my lust will prevail no more."
Those were excellent lines, but the rest of it I wasn't really feeling it, but it's not bad, I probably have to hear this to music to make bette judgement
Posted 16 Years Ago
Hmm, this wasn't bad, the lines I thought were the best were..."Take this lack of light from me"
"So the shadows will grow no more."
"Instill within an integrity"
"Finding strength to falter no more."
"Bury all my hypocrisy"
"And I'll hold judgement no more."
"Lend love legitimacy"
"And my lust will prevail no more."
Those were excellent lines, but the rest of it I wasn't really feeling it, but it's not bad, I probably have to hear this to music to make bette judgement
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
I definately hear a song in the lines, also a lot of second guessing, a lot of doubt. The saying is " I wish I knew then, what I know now," but, I've always said.." I wish I knew now..what I knew then" lol. We do think we know it all when we were younger. Great piece. Rain..
Posted 16 Years Ago
I definately hear a song in the lines, also a lot of second guessing, a lot of doubt. The saying is " I wish I knew then, what I know now," but, I've always said.." I wish I knew now..what I knew then" lol. We do think we know it all when we were younger. Great piece. Rain..
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
Great job! What do you mean "when" you knew everything! We still know it all!
I think that old age really just puts into perspective how little you really know.
-Gabe
Posted 16 Years Ago
Great job! What do you mean "when" you knew everything! We still know it all!
I think that old age really just puts into perspective how little you really know.
-Gabe
wow! When I knew everything, I think we can all identify with that . . .
Posted 16 Years Ago
wow! When I knew everything, I think we can all identify with that . . .
2 of 2 people found this review constructive.
I don't know the style of your music but this would work in several. It is well said. It flows gracefully as well... smooth rhythm. Almost a folkish/country feel to it.
Posted 16 Years Ago
I don't know the style of your music but this would work in several. It is well said. It flows gracefully as well... smooth rhythm. Almost a folkish/country feel to it.
2 of 2 people found this review constructive.
Beautiful and sad. Great song.
Posted 16 Years Ago
Beautiful and sad. Great song.
3 of 3 people found this review constructive.
So beautiful. You've described the feelings brilliantly. Thanks xx
Posted 16 Years Ago
So beautiful. You've described the feelings brilliantly. Thanks xx
3 of 3 people found this review constructive.
I like that song a lot. Really good job.
Love aAll, Mejasha
Posted 16 Years Ago
I like that song a lot. Really good job.
Love aAll, Mejasha
3 of 3 people found this review constructive.
Wow, I thought this song was lovely song! I liked most of the lyrics in this. Great job! :D
-Nicole
Posted 16 Years Ago
Wow, I thought this song was lovely song! I liked most of the lyrics in this. Great job! :D
-Nicole
3 of 3 people found this review constructive.
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