Dark Secrets

Lights Out... You can't find what you can't see. I’ve become a clouded face, unrecognized

DARK SECRETS

 

These eyes Tainted and Scarred,

The Heart restless behind bars,

A Soul lost between then and now

 

I’ve become a clouded face, unrecognized,

A Shadow within materializes

Unaware, there’s no time to prepare,

Unleashing its fury for all to bear

 

Strength it feeds from those who care,

Twisting and turning words and stares

Form is now what I once was,

It’s Poison if any… One of Love

 

Shadow now I, fight I try...

For those I hurt, my words are lies

Understand I cry, I feel your pain,

Ball and Chain, I am restrained

 

Pleasure filled, Darkness slips away,

Face left to those I've betrayed

Strength to hold on, You reach for my hand,

Smiling and Scarred, Your eyes Understand

 

SHADOW lingers and laughs within,

Your LOVE inside, he cannot win

 

Legacy

Author's Note

What is your Dark Secret - visit and enter yours today http://www.writerscafe.org/contests/-Volume-1%2C-Book-2--Dark-Secrets/13548/

P.S. Re-read and between the lines

Legacy

Reviews

[Luis Gabriel]

I love the minimalism! I love the shortness of the statements to really pack the punch of the emotion displayed! The only constructive work I would do is maybe some constructive imagery to tie the emotions to something I can see or feel, it feels alot like there are so many things felt blending all together I don't know where to start!

Great job, keep it up!

[R J Askew]

Indeed, dark secrets abound all around. They complicate lives infinitely, but they also make us and life interesting. They are an essential part of the whole game. I enjoyed your focus on them.

[Dominique]

Good, I loved the meaning.

[Sam Severn]

Totally freakin' ADORED this poem!!! The third verse was my fave.....just gorgeously written, right from the ♥!

[Boogieman Alzalaus]

I Really Love The Emphasis On The Dark Brooding Nature Behind All The Already Chaotic Emotion That Has Stirred. It Really Leaves An Imprint On Me In Particular For It Feels Like As Of This Morning, I Can Relate. That Is How It Feels Though.

[Kristallo]

So much guilt and pining is expressed here. The flow is undeniably captivating, I read it three times through and still i'm not satiated. There's a glimmer of hope, like a savior, that tries feebly to shine through the darkness of melancholy prose. Wonderful read.

[TheWriter]

I love how you made it so that I could really feel the emotion inside your words! Well done!

[Donald Cole]

I had to read this a few times, meaning within the meaning....
nice

[Donald Olds]

the feeling left behind I've sadly felt before. I love the way it's written but yet again i'm caught unawares bu the sudden imagery that is projected into my mind. I love it.

[Vague]

Your idea is presented in an interesting and seemingly meticulously crafted manner. Very much like the behavior you're describing. However, above all, the imagery and rhythm in this piece has me mesmerized. I'm glad I saw this, well done!

[Barbara Walker]

Taking in the love from others and something evil inside,turning it into something else, dark and dangerous, but YOUR essence isn't evil and you fight the good fight, you will overcome! Love this!