Dark Secrets

Lights Out... You can't find what you can't see. I’ve become a clouded face, unrecognized

DARK SECRETS

 

These eyes Tainted and Scarred,

The Heart restless behind bars,

A Soul lost between then and now

 

I’ve become a clouded face, unrecognized,

A Shadow within materializes

Unaware, there’s no time to prepare,

Unleashing its fury for all to bear

 

Strength it feeds from those who care,

Twisting and turning words and stares

Form is now what I once was,

It’s Poison if any… One of Love

 

Shadow now I, fight I try...

For those I hurt, my words are lies

Understand I cry, I feel your pain,

Ball and Chain, I am restrained

 

Pleasure filled, Darkness slips away,

Face left to those I've betrayed

Strength to hold on, You reach for my hand,

Smiling and Scarred, Your eyes Understand

 

SHADOW lingers and laughs within,

Your LOVE inside, he cannot win

 

Legacy

Author's Note

What is your Dark Secret - visit and enter yours today http://www.writerscafe.org/contests/-Volume-1%2C-Book-2--Dark-Secrets/13548/

P.S. Re-read and between the lines

Legacy

Reviews

[Luis Gabriel]

I love the minimalism! I love the shortness of the statements to really pack the punch of the emotion displayed! The only constructive work I would do is maybe some constructive imagery to tie the emotions to something I can see or feel, it feels alot like there are so many things felt blending all together I don't know where to start!

Great job, keep it up!

[Leave me alone....]

love it. almost describes how i feel right now perfectly.

[dutch2lips]

Impressive write this, loved how the darkness/madness took over.

[hedgehog]

love it

[jayray1975]

The last to lines are my favorite though I like the whole poem. My face is left to those I've betrayed...I can really relate to this line. I have hurt and let down alot of people that love me. I love the feeling in this poem, that is what is always impotant to me in a poem, that I can feel it.

[Mickeyboi]

Nice work here. Not sure what the form is.. not sure I care really the words are what is important. While there is layering the meaning is pretty obvious to me, sometimes as poets it is what we do not say that has the greatest impact. This poem says a little to much for me.
MIKE

[Crayon]

I love the darkness here. The way you've out the words together is beautiful, and I love that the poem has a ppoint, has something to it besides the fabulous darkness.

[Tom Benson]

On first reading I felt there was a personal disturbance because of some heinous act or treachery. On second reading as suggested I wondered if it might be the deceit brought about by falling for two people, perhaps a short love affair which was hard to get over and made worse by others knowing about it.

I'm still trying to get my head around the workings of the site again my friend but I will supply an entry. Whether fortunate or otherwise I have a few, but I might have to use an imaginary one to protect the guilty ... (me).

[Firequeen]

Profound
I did go back and re read and reread again.
amazing
I love what I took from it both reading it all the way through and reading between the lines
A superb write
Thank you for sharing
keep the ink flowing
fire

[Ivana Nagy]

So was she in love with him? The other guy? (you in this case)? Is it right to betray others? This poem makes me think that perhaps everybody has dark secrets. :) thank you, nice

[Raven Starhawk]

Dark Secrets was a superior read. Your chose to use large print gave it a unique feel that harnessed my interest and lead me to a fantastic conclusion that your words are at best well designed kisses.