Dark Secrets

Lights Out... You can't find what you can't see. I’ve become a clouded face, unrecognized

DARK SECRETS

 

These eyes Tainted and Scarred,

The Heart restless behind bars,

A Soul lost between then and now

 

I’ve become a clouded face, unrecognized,

A Shadow within materializes

Unaware, there’s no time to prepare,

Unleashing its fury for all to bear

 

Strength it feeds from those who care,

Twisting and turning words and stares

Form is now what I once was,

It’s Poison if any… One of Love

 

Shadow now I, fight I try...

For those I hurt, my words are lies

Understand I cry, I feel your pain,

Ball and Chain, I am restrained

 

Pleasure filled, Darkness slips away,

Face left to those I've betrayed

Strength to hold on, You reach for my hand,

Smiling and Scarred, Your eyes Understand

 

SHADOW lingers and laughs within,

Your LOVE inside, he cannot win

 

Legacy

Author's Note

What is your Dark Secret - visit and enter yours today http://www.writerscafe.org/contests/-Volume-1%2C-Book-2--Dark-Secrets/13548/

P.S. Re-read and between the lines

Legacy

Reviews

[Luis Gabriel]

I love the minimalism! I love the shortness of the statements to really pack the punch of the emotion displayed! The only constructive work I would do is maybe some constructive imagery to tie the emotions to something I can see or feel, it feels alot like there are so many things felt blending all together I don't know where to start!

Great job, keep it up!

[Allison]

I really liked it. It was very clever with the read in between the lines, very good.

[Cassie-Tastrophy]

This is really nice =0 I got all these images in my head...
Awesome!!

[Gypsie]

Hmm....an emotional vampire, lurking within the darkness of painful emotions. Leaving the writer hardly able to recognize themself, tortured in a sort of limbo while forsaking others who do not understand the draw of dark love. Pure and cutting to the soul leaving only bittersweet scars. Wonderful write!

[Kat]

This poem speaks to me like no other one has.......

[Becky C Strukamp]

A lot of feelings here along with many truths. Good writing.

[bill]

Sublime. Way to go Legacy.

[Cre8tive]

Wow! Nice!

[anindita]

Amazing!! Felt like those dark secrets were speaking out in their hollow voices!!Great job!!

[brenda]

oh ok gonna do that but this one was really good

[Brytt]

I love the use of unconventional capitols. It really emphasises the phrases within the poem. I also like how these capitolized words string together for phrases. Rereading this poem made everything much stronger in the long run.

I also enjoyed the symbolism. You created a wonderful image of an isolated person who needs someone to reach out. I love it.