Dark Secrets

Lights Out... You can't find what you can't see. I’ve become a clouded face, unrecognized

DARK SECRETS

 

These eyes Tainted and Scarred,

The Heart restless behind bars,

A Soul lost between then and now

 

I’ve become a clouded face, unrecognized,

A Shadow within materializes

Unaware, there’s no time to prepare,

Unleashing its fury for all to bear

 

Strength it feeds from those who care,

Twisting and turning words and stares

Form is now what I once was,

It’s Poison if any… One of Love

 

Shadow now I, fight I try...

For those I hurt, my words are lies

Understand I cry, I feel your pain,

Ball and Chain, I am restrained

 

Pleasure filled, Darkness slips away,

Face left to those I've betrayed

Strength to hold on, You reach for my hand,

Smiling and Scarred, Your eyes Understand

 

SHADOW lingers and laughs within,

Your LOVE inside, he cannot win

 

Legacy

Author's Note

What is your Dark Secret - visit and enter yours today http://www.writerscafe.org/contests/-Volume-1%2C-Book-2--Dark-Secrets/13548/

P.S. Re-read and between the lines

Legacy

Reviews

[Luis Gabriel]

I love the minimalism! I love the shortness of the statements to really pack the punch of the emotion displayed! The only constructive work I would do is maybe some constructive imagery to tie the emotions to something I can see or feel, it feels alot like there are so many things felt blending all together I don't know where to start!

Great job, keep it up!

[Roger Ferguson II]

very nice, lots of imagery, emotion, and good rhyme scheme. very well written.

[Jetta Zippora]

Wow. Dramatic and epic and beautiful. Brilliant write, friend.

[Nik]

I agree with Zee that this would make a great song!

[Ed Rector]

a bit abstract but that makes sense since you need to read between the lines.

[LadyHawke]

Solid, Bold and Direct. Flows quite well. Feeling the darkness and struggle from your words. Well written:)

[Divine Pain]

This is a very powerful piece...I believe we all go through this at a certain time in our lives...

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Raw...powerful :)

[xxxrawr_friendxxx]

This is very beautiful.

[Celestial Witch Child]

A beautiful write.

[BlackRose]

This shows strength, deep emotions. Drew me in. It really hits with those words and the way you put it together. And like one said it would make a great song. Excellent job.