Dark Secrets

Lights Out... You can't find what you can't see. I’ve become a clouded face, unrecognized

DARK SECRETS

 

These eyes Tainted and Scarred,

The Heart restless behind bars,

A Soul lost between then and now

 

I’ve become a clouded face, unrecognized,

A Shadow within materializes

Unaware, there’s no time to prepare,

Unleashing its fury for all to bear

 

Strength it feeds from those who care,

Twisting and turning words and stares

Form is now what I once was,

It’s Poison if any… One of Love

 

Shadow now I, fight I try...

For those I hurt, my words are lies

Understand I cry, I feel your pain,

Ball and Chain, I am restrained

 

Pleasure filled, Darkness slips away,

Face left to those I've betrayed

Strength to hold on, You reach for my hand,

Smiling and Scarred, Your eyes Understand

 

SHADOW lingers and laughs within,

Your LOVE inside, he cannot win

 

Legacy

Author's Note

What is your Dark Secret - visit and enter yours today http://www.writerscafe.org/contests/-Volume-1%2C-Book-2--Dark-Secrets/13548/

P.S. Re-read and between the lines

Legacy

Reviews

[Luis Gabriel]

I love the minimalism! I love the shortness of the statements to really pack the punch of the emotion displayed! The only constructive work I would do is maybe some constructive imagery to tie the emotions to something I can see or feel, it feels alot like there are so many things felt blending all together I don't know where to start!

Great job, keep it up!

[FantasyWriter01]

Great job. Love each stanza. Expresses great emotions and hard times, and a mixture of love, hardships, sadness, and other emotions. Not bad at all.

[Muse]

You wrote the story of so many, and you wrote it beautifully! My dark secret is better off buried, and there is shall stay.

[Kevin Horsley]

A very powerful write seeming to portray a betrayal which has poisoned the love felt for the other. Leading to the struggle within, something we all inevitably face.

[∂αʌ<..]

dark and deep...you clutched well at those dark secrets!
a master piece!

[Poet Cheryl]

This is a really beautiful and complicated read. I'm hearing a tormented soul of a man who cannot forgive himself for things of the past and a loving heart who understands the pain within him. Really great write and a joy to read.

[Maimai]

Love it :) Well written, shows virtuosity, with deep insight. I particularly favour the 4th stanza, good use of personal pronouns, which are neither too frequent or too scarce.
The poem has a powerful message; I deeply enjoyed reading this.

[Max]

I love this and thanks for sending me the read request. Darkness is something I enjoy in poetry as well as pain and love.

[Friks]

This will be part of your legacy! Lovely! Brilliant. This is well worth reading more than once.
I am thrilled by the theme of dark secrets as they are an art to portray in a poetically attractive or intriguing way. One can experiment as they are always very personal and are not bound by general perception, they also contain lots of indirect messages similar to that which a soul might want to express but cannot seem to break through.

Well done.

[PyroKitty24]

Very well written, you obviously knew exactly what you wanted to say

[Jalaj Mishra]

Wonderful