Dark Secrets

Lights Out... You can't find what you can't see. I’ve become a clouded face, unrecognized

DARK SECRETS

 

These eyes Tainted and Scarred,

The Heart restless behind bars,

A Soul lost between then and now

 

I’ve become a clouded face, unrecognized,

A Shadow within materializes

Unaware, there’s no time to prepare,

Unleashing its fury for all to bear

 

Strength it feeds from those who care,

Twisting and turning words and stares

Form is now what I once was,

It’s Poison if any… One of Love

 

Shadow now I, fight I try...

For those I hurt, my words are lies

Understand I cry, I feel your pain,

Ball and Chain, I am restrained

 

Pleasure filled, Darkness slips away,

Face left to those I've betrayed

Strength to hold on, You reach for my hand,

Smiling and Scarred, Your eyes Understand

 

SHADOW lingers and laughs within,

Your LOVE inside, he cannot win

 

Legacy

Author's Note

What is your Dark Secret - visit and enter yours today http://www.writerscafe.org/contests/-Volume-1%2C-Book-2--Dark-Secrets/13548/

P.S. Re-read and between the lines

Legacy

Reviews

[Luis Gabriel]

I love the minimalism! I love the shortness of the statements to really pack the punch of the emotion displayed! The only constructive work I would do is maybe some constructive imagery to tie the emotions to something I can see or feel, it feels alot like there are so many things felt blending all together I don't know where to start!

Great job, keep it up!

[Roze Collions]

not bad but a little 2 dark for me made me want to run away

[Gerri Tucker]

Lovely, really and truly lovely.

[RedInk524]

I love the darkness. I love the feelings of despair mixed with insanity. Beautiful.

[nevermindfan1991]

Great poem, you write well considering you have to follow a rhyme scheme. Job well done. I'm trying to write poetry this summer, and I'm wondering if you could give me so tips?

[Dark Angel ~]

Very dark... bur enticing... I like this a lot ^^

[Poetic-Theorem]

Wonderful, you leave this open to many interpretations which is great in poetry, everyone will relate to it in his or her own way. Well crafted, smooth flow in rhyme. Powerful emotions all throughout your poem. Well done! David

[Princess LouLou]

Very good, :)

[RedBull7]

very nice(: I really felt like i could lose myself in the words while reading this

[Ciarraí Danielle..]

Beautifully written. This could be taken multiple ways, which is always good in a poem. You may have a very specific story behind why you wrote it, but to all your readers, it will speak to them individually.
You have inspired me. And now I'm off to write my own entry. XD

[kymee]

That poem is awesome. It was different and I like that. I got lost a few times, but at the end you had me thinking. good job