Dark Secrets

Lights Out... You can't find what you can't see. I’ve become a clouded face, unrecognized

DARK SECRETS

 

These eyes Tainted and Scarred,

The Heart restless behind bars,

A Soul lost between then and now

 

I’ve become a clouded face, unrecognized,

A Shadow within materializes

Unaware, there’s no time to prepare,

Unleashing its fury for all to bear

 

Strength it feeds from those who care,

Twisting and turning words and stares

Form is now what I once was,

It’s Poison if any… One of Love

 

Shadow now I, fight I try...

For those I hurt, my words are lies

Understand I cry, I feel your pain,

Ball and Chain, I am restrained

 

Pleasure filled, Darkness slips away,

Face left to those I've betrayed

Strength to hold on, You reach for my hand,

Smiling and Scarred, Your eyes Understand

 

SHADOW lingers and laughs within,

Your LOVE inside, he cannot win

 

Legacy

Author's Note

What is your Dark Secret - visit and enter yours today http://www.writerscafe.org/contests/-Volume-1%2C-Book-2--Dark-Secrets/13548/

P.S. Re-read and between the lines

Legacy

Reviews

[Luis Gabriel]

I love the minimalism! I love the shortness of the statements to really pack the punch of the emotion displayed! The only constructive work I would do is maybe some constructive imagery to tie the emotions to something I can see or feel, it feels alot like there are so many things felt blending all together I don't know where to start!

Great job, keep it up!

[Rachael]

Very nice! Flow is flawless! I find the font a teensy bit distracting though.

I get the image of a person turning into a monster. I'm a little bit worried about the other person in this relationship. I wonder if perhaps they should be more afraid??

Keep up the good work!

[Mikayla Rasmussen]

THAT WAS VERY INTERESTING. I SOMETIMES DO FEEL THAT PEOPLE ARE LIKE THAT. GOOD JOB

[Nicole]

Beautiful!I love how you capture and express the raw emotions in this poem.i definately felt the hopelessness,despair and pain.

[Inyourshadow]

This is beautiful, the sadness of a love sought and thought found only to be but a dream a pleasureable memory. The ending kind of sounds more religious than romantic like the line ~ Smiling and scarred, Your eyes understand ~ brings Jesus to mind, maybe I read too deep but it is how I read this piece. Keep em' coming

[Ruth]

Dark and literally haunting love..superb poetry! You always take the emotions and manipulate words around them that infuse the reader with such empathy!
xx

[The fallen of innocence]

lovely work as always......though this also reminds me of the sadness that iced my youth and the love of my friends that made me see the truth...... well written and i enjoy your writing as always

[MS. BABy]

Beautiful.....As i conspire to retire but this tawdry episode
is mine to keep...Shall I make you weep
one thousand drops at a time for each and every dime
that has been seen in a vision
Or do I desire to be killed in a Manly womanly colision.......
I liked....
thanks for this site, I am new here....

[Kiari Sabon]

i love it :}

[mi-chan]

i'm not the only one who kinda felt like rapping this, right? ^^
it had a really good flow with lots of imagery. this really was a good poem with deep meaning, and generally when I comment on poems that I like this much I note which stanza or line I really liked the most. I can't do that with yours because the entire poem was so well written. 1st one going in my library! well done =)

[obvious pseudonym]

i liked the darkness. you could really feel the hopelessness and despair. each individual person could take it anyway they wanted to. i really enjoyed reading it, good job.