Dark Secrets

Lights Out... You can't find what you can't see. I’ve become a clouded face, unrecognized

DARK SECRETS

 

These eyes Tainted and Scarred,

The Heart restless behind bars,

A Soul lost between then and now

 

I’ve become a clouded face, unrecognized,

A Shadow within materializes

Unaware, there’s no time to prepare,

Unleashing its fury for all to bear

 

Strength it feeds from those who care,

Twisting and turning words and stares

Form is now what I once was,

It’s Poison if any… One of Love

 

Shadow now I, fight I try...

For those I hurt, my words are lies

Understand I cry, I feel your pain,

Ball and Chain, I am restrained

 

Pleasure filled, Darkness slips away,

Face left to those I've betrayed

Strength to hold on, You reach for my hand,

Smiling and Scarred, Your eyes Understand

 

SHADOW lingers and laughs within,

Your LOVE inside, he cannot win

 

Legacy

Author's Note

What is your Dark Secret - visit and enter yours today http://www.writerscafe.org/contests/-Volume-1%2C-Book-2--Dark-Secrets/13548/

P.S. Re-read and between the lines

Legacy

Reviews

[Luis Gabriel]

I love the minimalism! I love the shortness of the statements to really pack the punch of the emotion displayed! The only constructive work I would do is maybe some constructive imagery to tie the emotions to something I can see or feel, it feels alot like there are so many things felt blending all together I don't know where to start!

Great job, keep it up!

[compositionc]

Fantastic. Really pulls out all the emotion.

[*[_Natasha_]*]

wow,this is great Legacy!

[marielondon]

This is great. Explores the depths of human emotion.

[~Paedams]

I loved it!

[Gypsy]

I like this poem! We seem to have similar writing styles :)

[CharlesMonroe]

I love this.....
thats all I can say.

[silentpoet]

Very beautiful and sad. deep and emotional I felt more than one side of a love's story while reading this...great write!

[torments_scribe]

Strange how the greatest emotion we can produce is also the one that can hurt the most. You conveyed this beautifully and your structure was very well done. Exceptional work with your rhyming scheme and a powerfully somber message. Excellent work :)

note: I also picked up on the "bare", it it's for people to "see" than you need "bear"

[Victoria Scott]

Beautifully written....I loved how it flowed perfectly...usually I am not a big fan of rhyming because it sounds forced, but that flowed perfectly...and it was very deep, I loved it :D

[Katseye]

Very interesting and powerful. Good work.