Dark Secrets

Lights Out... You can't find what you can't see. I’ve become a clouded face, unrecognized

DARK SECRETS

 

These eyes Tainted and Scarred,

The Heart restless behind bars,

A Soul lost between then and now

 

I’ve become a clouded face, unrecognized,

A Shadow within materializes

Unaware, there’s no time to prepare,

Unleashing its fury for all to bear

 

Strength it feeds from those who care,

Twisting and turning words and stares

Form is now what I once was,

It’s Poison if any… One of Love

 

Shadow now I, fight I try...

For those I hurt, my words are lies

Understand I cry, I feel your pain,

Ball and Chain, I am restrained

 

Pleasure filled, Darkness slips away,

Face left to those I've betrayed

Strength to hold on, You reach for my hand,

Smiling and Scarred, Your eyes Understand

 

SHADOW lingers and laughs within,

Your LOVE inside, he cannot win

 

Legacy

Author's Note

What is your Dark Secret - visit and enter yours today http://www.writerscafe.org/contests/-Volume-1%2C-Book-2--Dark-Secrets/13548/

P.S. Re-read and between the lines

Legacy

Reviews

[Luis Gabriel]

I love the minimalism! I love the shortness of the statements to really pack the punch of the emotion displayed! The only constructive work I would do is maybe some constructive imagery to tie the emotions to something I can see or feel, it feels alot like there are so many things felt blending all together I don't know where to start!

Great job, keep it up!

[Priyanka]

its deep n very meaningful...i liked it.good job!i like the line "I've become a clouded face,unrecognized"...its very beautiful.

[Anonymous]

I like this a lot! I love the vagueness and mystery of it all :)

[Bewitching Sensations]

Brilliant piece :)

[L.G. Knight]

The use of fewer words to make a larger statement is genius. I have always envied people who could make that work. I would love to be able to place just the right words in just the right way and draw a picture with just a couple words. This is my favorite type of poetry. Though oft times I find myself unable to pull it off myself.
perhaps my favorite lines
"Shadow now I, fight I try...

For those I hurt, my words are lies"

I keep coming back to them can't say for sure why but I find them powerful.

Anyway thatnks for sharing I truly enjoyed it.

[Kimberly R. Larkins]

I LOVE THIS.

[Fangs_Of_Ink]

very good

[Michael Bredemeyer]

been reading the ballad of reading gaol again recently, ironic. i like this legacy!

[Monique-elise Delagraen..]

"Your LOVE inside, he cannot win" is my favorite line.

[Jordan Harpter]

A great read. It was such an easy read as well. It was as if your words flowed together in a seamless wonderful fashion. Thank you for putting together such a treat for me to read.