Dark Secrets

Lights Out... You can't find what you can't see. I’ve become a clouded face, unrecognized

DARK SECRETS

 

These eyes Tainted and Scarred,

The Heart restless behind bars,

A Soul lost between then and now

 

I’ve become a clouded face, unrecognized,

A Shadow within materializes

Unaware, there’s no time to prepare,

Unleashing its fury for all to bear

 

Strength it feeds from those who care,

Twisting and turning words and stares

Form is now what I once was,

It’s Poison if any… One of Love

 

Shadow now I, fight I try...

For those I hurt, my words are lies

Understand I cry, I feel your pain,

Ball and Chain, I am restrained

 

Pleasure filled, Darkness slips away,

Face left to those I've betrayed

Strength to hold on, You reach for my hand,

Smiling and Scarred, Your eyes Understand

 

SHADOW lingers and laughs within,

Your LOVE inside, he cannot win

 

Legacy

Author's Note

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P.S. Re-read and between the lines

Legacy

Reviews

[Luis Gabriel]

I love the minimalism! I love the shortness of the statements to really pack the punch of the emotion displayed! The only constructive work I would do is maybe some constructive imagery to tie the emotions to something I can see or feel, it feels alot like there are so many things felt blending all together I don't know where to start!

Great job, keep it up!

[kevluvtory]

Sorry but when I read poetry at times I visualise if that is the right term the voice of someone famous reading out loud the work. Your's gave me Captain James Tiberius Kirk with his laboured intensity which makes all speech laboriously painfully funny without meaning to.
I am also a great lover of rhythm and rhyme and this whilst no doubt is exquisitely dark within the subject matter of subjugation of one by another and subsequent struggle for release I feel it would perhaps have been better served without rhyme structures be they true or false positive in their nature.

[Clay Feet]

I feel there is sorrow from one who is now regretting past pain inflicted upon others and carries both guilt yet ambivalence. One who speaks from the bitter confines of a new unrewarding involvement to an old love whose heart went uncaptured.

Dark, deep and excellently written.

[snopadelic]

I don't reallu understand potery but this was awesome. It's very dark, gothic and easy to read. But more complex which makes you think about the words. Really really good.

[Bone and Brine]

Ooooh. This gave me chills. I love it.

[Daisy Morgy]

Really shows you allot of emotion behind each sentence wonderful write!

[Hotwater]

Sounds like you have a lover on the side! yummy!
Regards.

[Saya666]

very beautiful. touching. i wish i couldve read it earlier on. your very good

I'm getting images of a Poe like suicide. A conversation between the soul and the shadow over taking the body as the soul leaves- very nice.

[Kayleigh]

I love this.

I interpreted as sort of a battle between Love and the Shadow. Not entirely sure though? Either way, fantastic job!

[Samantha Heaton]

I absolutly love the flow of this poem great job!