Dark Secrets

Lights Out... You can't find what you can't see. I’ve become a clouded face, unrecognized

DARK SECRETS

 

These eyes Tainted and Scarred,

The Heart restless behind bars,

A Soul lost between then and now

 

I’ve become a clouded face, unrecognized,

A Shadow within materializes

Unaware, there’s no time to prepare,

Unleashing its fury for all to bear

 

Strength it feeds from those who care,

Twisting and turning words and stares

Form is now what I once was,

It’s Poison if any… One of Love

 

Shadow now I, fight I try...

For those I hurt, my words are lies

Understand I cry, I feel your pain,

Ball and Chain, I am restrained

 

Pleasure filled, Darkness slips away,

Face left to those I've betrayed

Strength to hold on, You reach for my hand,

Smiling and Scarred, Your eyes Understand

 

SHADOW lingers and laughs within,

Your LOVE inside, he cannot win

 

Legacy

Author's Note

What is your Dark Secret - visit and enter yours today http://www.writerscafe.org/contests/-Volume-1%2C-Book-2--Dark-Secrets/13548/

P.S. Re-read and between the lines

Legacy

Reviews

[Luis Gabriel]

I love the minimalism! I love the shortness of the statements to really pack the punch of the emotion displayed! The only constructive work I would do is maybe some constructive imagery to tie the emotions to something I can see or feel, it feels alot like there are so many things felt blending all together I don't know where to start!

Great job, keep it up!

[Elizabeth Carponti]

Really a joy able read indeed.

[Beast]

Cool poem. I think you really know what you mean into this. You put a lot of word and even more feelings in here. Good stuff.

[M.Babu]

This is such perfect poetry! I love every aspect of it..from the structure to the flow to the diction and subtle tone that's erratic at parts. What brilliant flair!

"Strength to hold on, You reach for my hand,
Smiling and Scarred, Your eyes Understand "

Great stuff!

[durzothorn]

great work

[traveling mind]

i know most after reading the reviews like so many other parts than
Shadow now I, fight I try...
For those I hurt, my words are lies
Understand I cry, I feel your pain,
Ball and Chain, I am restrained

BUT for me this caught my attetion i truly enjoyed all of the words to your poem easy to relate to easy to feel but for me this part stood out the most. your work is easy to relate to and be in tune with what you are writing, i look forward to reading more.

[Kasey]

Great job! My favorite two lines are "Strength to hold on, You reach for my hand,/ Smiling and Scarred, Your eyes Understand". Very beautiful.

[DelicateSymphony]

This is an outstanding piece!

I love these two lines

"A Shadow within materializes"

and

Strength it feeds from those who care,

In my opinion it really speaks the truth about strength and how a shadow or darkness can form within a person and twist everything towards a dark ending. I also love how you can rhyme things together and still keep it flowing, it makes for an even better read! (I can't rhyme at all!)

[Steve Beairsto]

Excellent work!

[SimplyDisastrous]

Excellent piece(:

[Saburi Pandit]

nice 1 ... there is something very dark in dis poem ...which has really come up to d expectations created by the title . liked it !! gud 1