Dark Secrets

Lights Out... You can't find what you can't see. I’ve become a clouded face, unrecognized

DARK SECRETS

 

These eyes Tainted and Scarred,

The Heart restless behind bars,

A Soul lost between then and now

 

I’ve become a clouded face, unrecognized,

A Shadow within materializes

Unaware, there’s no time to prepare,

Unleashing its fury for all to bear

 

Strength it feeds from those who care,

Twisting and turning words and stares

Form is now what I once was,

It’s Poison if any… One of Love

 

Shadow now I, fight I try...

For those I hurt, my words are lies

Understand I cry, I feel your pain,

Ball and Chain, I am restrained

 

Pleasure filled, Darkness slips away,

Face left to those I've betrayed

Strength to hold on, You reach for my hand,

Smiling and Scarred, Your eyes Understand

 

SHADOW lingers and laughs within,

Your LOVE inside, he cannot win

 

Legacy

Author's Note

What is your Dark Secret - visit and enter yours today http://www.writerscafe.org/contests/-Volume-1%2C-Book-2--Dark-Secrets/13548/

P.S. Re-read and between the lines

Legacy

Reviews

[Luis Gabriel]

I love the minimalism! I love the shortness of the statements to really pack the punch of the emotion displayed! The only constructive work I would do is maybe some constructive imagery to tie the emotions to something I can see or feel, it feels alot like there are so many things felt blending all together I don't know where to start!

Great job, keep it up!

[Journey21]

what, isn't all poetry ramblings of the heart... soul... being within? I may have missed the point of that comment (in featured review J.) I thought it was thought provoking, deep, kinky *may just be me* but definitely emotional. I liked it and would like to read more. I can't worry about punctuation or caps or lower case when I write, just have to let it flow. Great job Legacy.

[Simpleselwah]

=OO this poem is amazing!!

[Mr. ECHO]

i like it. i counted several hidden poems within the poem.

[Dms]

Dark secrets slip into everyone's shadows when the sun rises each morning. Best read at night, when they can travel farthest. That said, the first few lines would frame this as a reaction to emotional scarring, likely from a bad relationship. The second and third make it seem like the character is lashing out at family and friends (a believable reaction). The fourth stanza seemed a bit blurred to me though. Fighting as a shadow, perhaps against inner turmoil, or against the world? Alienated by the people hurt by his actions. Then empathizing with them and feeling restrained becomes pleasure. Lost me a bit after that, but I liked the simplicity of the controlling metaphor.

[mark slade]

very good. i liked it

[myst-ry]

restraints and tied feet behind the acts that are seen as apparent betrayals and thus the helplessness to mend the flimsy thread once it gets snapped... despite the feelings and understandings differences once created in a realtionship can't be totally covered up.. beautifully expressed.. esp the last line 'Your LOVE inside, he cannot win' says a lot.
interesting write !

[kdpgrahi]

"It's Poison if any>>>> One of Love" sounds mysterious. Indicates a dark secret? It is a complexity I feel. However a good poem to read.

[Yevette Lee]

While reading first word to come in my mind was mysterious. So what is the dark secret ? :)

[kerry sweeney]

thats brill well done x

[Sehkmet]

I always enjoy riding through the transformation of words to feeling between each line. You do that rather well with this poem. Honored to have read this one.