Dark Secrets

Lights Out... You can't find what you can't see. I’ve become a clouded face, unrecognized

DARK SECRETS

 

These eyes Tainted and Scarred,

The Heart restless behind bars,

A Soul lost between then and now

 

I’ve become a clouded face, unrecognized,

A Shadow within materializes

Unaware, there’s no time to prepare,

Unleashing its fury for all to bear

 

Strength it feeds from those who care,

Twisting and turning words and stares

Form is now what I once was,

It’s Poison if any… One of Love

 

Shadow now I, fight I try...

For those I hurt, my words are lies

Understand I cry, I feel your pain,

Ball and Chain, I am restrained

 

Pleasure filled, Darkness slips away,

Face left to those I've betrayed

Strength to hold on, You reach for my hand,

Smiling and Scarred, Your eyes Understand

 

SHADOW lingers and laughs within,

Your LOVE inside, he cannot win

 

Legacy

Author's Note

What is your Dark Secret - visit and enter yours today http://www.writerscafe.org/contests/-Volume-1%2C-Book-2--Dark-Secrets/13548/

P.S. Re-read and between the lines

Legacy

Reviews

[Luis Gabriel]

I love the minimalism! I love the shortness of the statements to really pack the punch of the emotion displayed! The only constructive work I would do is maybe some constructive imagery to tie the emotions to something I can see or feel, it feels alot like there are so many things felt blending all together I don't know where to start!

Great job, keep it up!

[Nazereth]

This is beautiful. I can relate with it, as I'm sure everyone can, for having a secret of the heart.

[Mia Fin]

Beautiful - it is rare for me to find a rhyming poem that gets to me as much as this did... I love it

[marybeth davis]

i fell in love with the sweet ryhmes lol i love every lil thing in this poem its beasty legacy!!!!:)))))))))))

[Liz Gillitzer]

Love hurts, secrets corrode the heart...I wonder if others see this in this poem as I do...secrets make people miserable...my secrets make me ache...I'm sure that they do the same to others, too...

[E.V. Black]

I used to have a dark secret inside of me. I still have many inside of me that I won't dare whisper to any ear but mine own. This is an understandable poem. We all have our shadows as well as our light.

[Eric Wagner]

you triangulate your love like a strangler. Choking the very air from which you wish to breathe.

[anne p. murray- LadeeAn..]

Very mysterious and well written.
I'm always up for a challenge. Although I've never read your writings before this one (I plan on reading more)

I took this mysterious secret as a vampire, lost between living and dying, unable to stop feeding on others.

"Form is now what I once was", to me, means the evil is perpetrated on others because he/she has no choice, thus the form; "once a vampire, always a vampire, therefore, "a ball and chain".

"Strength to hold on, You reach for my hand,
Smiling and Scarred, Your eyes Understand"

To me, this means the person reaching for their hand knows he/ she must have blood for strength, thus the scars, and their eyes understand the need.

As for you choosing to captalize some of the letters; as far as I'm concerned poetry is personal, very personal, therefore, what one writes and "How" they write it is part of their own individial creativity and should not be criticized by anyone for the manner in which they choose to "unleash" their art and creativity. That would be smoothering the creative juices and fire, to only go along with what seems acceptable to others.

I say "Fly" with your individual flair, do whatever feels right to you!!!

Ignore reviews that cannot understand individual creativity. Thats what I choose to do.
That's my go at it

[i_aiden]

Interesting and morbid. I love it.

[Sakib]

Exquisitely written....loved it.

[Review]

i don't know about you but doing a really good rhyming poem can be pretty difficult i think it was pretty good for how much rhyming was going on good job

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