Dark Secrets

Lights Out... You can't find what you can't see. I’ve become a clouded face, unrecognized

DARK SECRETS

 

These eyes Tainted and Scarred,

The Heart restless behind bars,

A Soul lost between then and now

 

I’ve become a clouded face, unrecognized,

A Shadow within materializes

Unaware, there’s no time to prepare,

Unleashing its fury for all to bear

 

Strength it feeds from those who care,

Twisting and turning words and stares

Form is now what I once was,

It’s Poison if any… One of Love

 

Shadow now I, fight I try...

For those I hurt, my words are lies

Understand I cry, I feel your pain,

Ball and Chain, I am restrained

 

Pleasure filled, Darkness slips away,

Face left to those I've betrayed

Strength to hold on, You reach for my hand,

Smiling and Scarred, Your eyes Understand

 

SHADOW lingers and laughs within,

Your LOVE inside, he cannot win

 

Legacy

Author's Note

What is your Dark Secret - visit and enter yours today http://www.writerscafe.org/contests/-Volume-1%2C-Book-2--Dark-Secrets/13548/

P.S. Re-read and between the lines

Legacy

Reviews

[Luis Gabriel]

I love the minimalism! I love the shortness of the statements to really pack the punch of the emotion displayed! The only constructive work I would do is maybe some constructive imagery to tie the emotions to something I can see or feel, it feels alot like there are so many things felt blending all together I don't know where to start!

Great job, keep it up!

[Mahigan]

It's interesting. Right now I'm not entirely sure what to make of it, it still seems unfinished and not fully formed. But that is not to say it is not good.

[honeyleens]

Great rhythm and rhyme that create a new flow. I would say that some of the rhymes seem a little forced though, but overall a nice write!

[ikuhyiu]

Great emotion in this! Love the rhythm

[ivanscutt]

great rhythm to this - reads quickly and has a certain impact :) i'd say some of the rhymes are a bit unnecessary if not forced, and wordchoice a little cliche, but that's just taste really.
Ivan

[Crimson Goddess]

Love Love Love the emotion in this.

[Hunter C. Brown]

the wording in this poem is great. lots of flow and emotion too

[Anna]

Awesome word choice! This is true poetry in motion!

[Evelyn]

Really good flow to it, and good choice of words.

[Manpreet]

Beautiful poem! Smooth flow of expressions.

[ni ni]

I love this, Dark Secret is one poem that I can relate to. Thank you!