Dark Secrets

Lights Out... You can't find what you can't see. I’ve become a clouded face, unrecognized

DARK SECRETS

 

These eyes Tainted and Scarred,

The Heart restless behind bars,

A Soul lost between then and now

 

I’ve become a clouded face, unrecognized,

A Shadow within materializes

Unaware, there’s no time to prepare,

Unleashing its fury for all to bear

 

Strength it feeds from those who care,

Twisting and turning words and stares

Form is now what I once was,

It’s Poison if any… One of Love

 

Shadow now I, fight I try...

For those I hurt, my words are lies

Understand I cry, I feel your pain,

Ball and Chain, I am restrained

 

Pleasure filled, Darkness slips away,

Face left to those I've betrayed

Strength to hold on, You reach for my hand,

Smiling and Scarred, Your eyes Understand

 

SHADOW lingers and laughs within,

Your LOVE inside, he cannot win

 

Legacy

Author's Note

What is your Dark Secret - visit and enter yours today http://www.writerscafe.org/contests/-Volume-1%2C-Book-2--Dark-Secrets/13548/

P.S. Re-read and between the lines

Legacy

Reviews

[Luis Gabriel]

I love the minimalism! I love the shortness of the statements to really pack the punch of the emotion displayed! The only constructive work I would do is maybe some constructive imagery to tie the emotions to something I can see or feel, it feels alot like there are so many things felt blending all together I don't know where to start!

Great job, keep it up!

[Stephanie McCants]

Beautifully written and flows so easily describing inner demons we all live with. Thumbs up.

[Blissful Sin]

I'm in love with this piece!! Amazing!!

-Bliss

[realmwriter]

Damn that's deep. Anguish and understanding in a frozen world of loneliness where no other can win the heart you have one least of all one who let it go...! Awesome, very creative piece...!

[Jayne Ann Saporito]

This is raw and pure. No embellishment but the truth and sometimes that is the only light we need.

[Antoinette]

I am fortunate to have stumbled across Dark Secrets, so very fitting at this particular time in my life. I think your use of rhyme was a perfect choice, it really enhanced how it felt to me, which for me is this dangerous, daring, scandalousness that one has helplessly fallen into. I really do appreciate the mood you were able to create and the construction is superb, even now you're words are whirling through my mind in this deliciously dark and dramatic way... I love it.

[Erin Adams]

Absolutely amazing. One of my fav's of all your pieces my friend

[wim99]

Drawing the reader from the fine line
Between innocence and consciosness,
I like your style.

[ni ni]

Wow that is really good! Very nice work!!!

[ODMK {Oliver D.M King]]

Wow! awesome, a little short but very good read nonetheless

[A.j. Dru]

I'm usually not too impressed by poetry that sticks to rhyme, but I can dig this. As others have said, the minimalism is a nice touch and the subject is deep. I'd like to see more that isn't restricted by rhyme, but I can dig this. Great work and keep writing and posting.