Dark Secrets

Lights Out... You can't find what you can't see. I’ve become a clouded face, unrecognized

DARK SECRETS

 

These eyes Tainted and Scarred,

The Heart restless behind bars,

A Soul lost between then and now

 

I’ve become a clouded face, unrecognized,

A Shadow within materializes

Unaware, there’s no time to prepare,

Unleashing its fury for all to bear

 

Strength it feeds from those who care,

Twisting and turning words and stares

Form is now what I once was,

It’s Poison if any… One of Love

 

Shadow now I, fight I try...

For those I hurt, my words are lies

Understand I cry, I feel your pain,

Ball and Chain, I am restrained

 

Pleasure filled, Darkness slips away,

Face left to those I've betrayed

Strength to hold on, You reach for my hand,

Smiling and Scarred, Your eyes Understand

 

SHADOW lingers and laughs within,

Your LOVE inside, he cannot win

 

Legacy

Author's Note

What is your Dark Secret - visit and enter yours today http://www.writerscafe.org/contests/-Volume-1%2C-Book-2--Dark-Secrets/13548/

P.S. Re-read and between the lines

Legacy

Reviews

[Luis Gabriel]

I love the minimalism! I love the shortness of the statements to really pack the punch of the emotion displayed! The only constructive work I would do is maybe some constructive imagery to tie the emotions to something I can see or feel, it feels alot like there are so many things felt blending all together I don't know where to start!

Great job, keep it up!

[Passingdaze]

I enjoyed reading this

[Calypso0]

wow, that's the only word that came into my mind when I first read this. The second time, goosebumps all over my skin. And, yes, I read it a third time, too, because I really really loved it. There is a vagueness, a mystery, a darkness even, that is simply fascinating about this poem. Beautiful work, perfectly written. Amazing.

[Silent Lover]

Poems communicate feelings that at times are difficult to express. You've done well here in capturing the elusive emotions of human frailty, as well as the triumph of love and understanding.

[diamond eyes]

Deep calls to deep. Suppressed conflicts surfacing explosively; well captured, very nice flow.

[Adel Eyes]

It kept a good rythem and pace. I reread without the end commas and the rythem and pace stayed the same. See what you think. It was not wordy but produced good imagery. niiiiice ........sorry I don't write dark but thanks for the invite

[Dakota "Zero" Jones]

very good. I enjoyed it a lot

[Jack]

Legacy, a supreme write. Very well done, this is outstanding.

[Ky]

Wow. A steady rythm. A strong image. Well done

[blakjassy]

I really loke this piece, it reads well, especially aloud and it flows so very nicely

I like the darkness and then the hope it inspires at the end. A very strong message

[nicolo]

I love the CAPS. xD