Dark Secrets

Lights Out... You can't find what you can't see. I’ve become a clouded face, unrecognized

DARK SECRETS

 

These eyes Tainted and Scarred,

The Heart restless behind bars,

A Soul lost between then and now

 

I’ve become a clouded face, unrecognized,

A Shadow within materializes

Unaware, there’s no time to prepare,

Unleashing its fury for all to bear

 

Strength it feeds from those who care,

Twisting and turning words and stares

Form is now what I once was,

It’s Poison if any… One of Love

 

Shadow now I, fight I try...

For those I hurt, my words are lies

Understand I cry, I feel your pain,

Ball and Chain, I am restrained

 

Pleasure filled, Darkness slips away,

Face left to those I've betrayed

Strength to hold on, You reach for my hand,

Smiling and Scarred, Your eyes Understand

 

SHADOW lingers and laughs within,

Your LOVE inside, he cannot win

 

Legacy

Author's Note

What is your Dark Secret - visit and enter yours today http://www.writerscafe.org/contests/-Volume-1%2C-Book-2--Dark-Secrets/13548/

P.S. Re-read and between the lines

Legacy

Reviews

[Luis Gabriel]

I love the minimalism! I love the shortness of the statements to really pack the punch of the emotion displayed! The only constructive work I would do is maybe some constructive imagery to tie the emotions to something I can see or feel, it feels alot like there are so many things felt blending all together I don't know where to start!

Great job, keep it up!

[eatmills]

such amazing imagery that Dark Secrets conjures within the confines of my own mind. Well Done.

[R.A. Casilao]

Awesome! The emotion blisters in the surface. The pain is profoundly burning underneath.

[Violeta]

Fantastic! The rhyme scheme worked perfectly for you, which is a skill I quite admire in writers that can pull it off correctly. "Shadow lingers and laughs within, your love inside, he cannot win." This is the "shove in your face" part of the poem, and I love it. This piece shows the struggle that so many of us can relate to, the demons we've battled and held back for so long. Wonderful job.

[Gobinder Singh Dhindsa]

Yeah, its great. I like whole poem and i feel its deepness. Gudluck

[Teri B]

There's so much pain here... Very nicely evoked!

[Hester Grey]

haunting and stirring, the great Masters would approve

[Gaiamethod]

It makes me think of the guy who recently killed all of those people in Norway. Stuck inside of himself. His idea of love completely filled with shadow.
But, only love and understanding can truly heal the shadow within. And not many people can do that! Takes a brave soul to love it all, within and without.
Great poem!

[Alexander Mccarthey]

This is absolutely genius. Keep it up!

[Evaine Andrews]

this is amazing! i love it! so much emotion!

[Su]

This is amazing! I love how it's short, but leaves a lasting impression. You can really feel the emotion.