Dark Secrets

Lights Out... You can't find what you can't see. I’ve become a clouded face, unrecognized

DARK SECRETS

 

These eyes Tainted and Scarred,

The Heart restless behind bars,

A Soul lost between then and now

 

I’ve become a clouded face, unrecognized,

A Shadow within materializes

Unaware, there’s no time to prepare,

Unleashing its fury for all to bear

 

Strength it feeds from those who care,

Twisting and turning words and stares

Form is now what I once was,

It’s Poison if any… One of Love

 

Shadow now I, fight I try...

For those I hurt, my words are lies

Understand I cry, I feel your pain,

Ball and Chain, I am restrained

 

Pleasure filled, Darkness slips away,

Face left to those I've betrayed

Strength to hold on, You reach for my hand,

Smiling and Scarred, Your eyes Understand

 

SHADOW lingers and laughs within,

Your LOVE inside, he cannot win

 

Legacy

Author's Note

What is your Dark Secret - visit and enter yours today http://www.writerscafe.org/contests/-Volume-1%2C-Book-2--Dark-Secrets/13548/

P.S. Re-read and between the lines

Legacy

Reviews

[Luis Gabriel]

I love the minimalism! I love the shortness of the statements to really pack the punch of the emotion displayed! The only constructive work I would do is maybe some constructive imagery to tie the emotions to something I can see or feel, it feels alot like there are so many things felt blending all together I don't know where to start!

Great job, keep it up!

[Sindhuja Seshadri]

It truly is a wonderful piece of poetry! :-)

[Beautiful Disaster_33]

Beautiful!
Each line drew me further in, understand this one well
Great write!

[Ashleigh]

I agree with Luis Gabriel - this could benefit a lot from some specific imagery. The poem feels like a lot of loose emotions and I think they'd carry more weight if we knew /why/ the speaker felt that way.

[Jvonne]

I loved this piece, it has all the right characteristics to keep one captivated. Job well done!

[Jessi Leigh]

Such truth you speak. Words that move as anger does like a snake who strikes at anything and everything due to its own fears. Thank you for you words, and your craft and care in your expression of them.

[Brandon]

This is really amazing, beautifully written, flows nicely, and very easy to relate to. At least for me.

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Wow! Took my breath away! This is a really great poem it shows how anger and fury can affect others as well as ourselves, wow its just really good!

[Flutterby_angel]

wow! i absolutely love this piece. the imagery of this writing. it actually makes one feel as though they can understand.

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This describes me so much.......I LOVE IT. this is totally amazing. an amazing piece