Dark Secrets

Lights Out... You can't find what you can't see. I’ve become a clouded face, unrecognized

DARK SECRETS

 

These eyes Tainted and Scarred,

The Heart restless behind bars,

A Soul lost between then and now

 

I’ve become a clouded face, unrecognized,

A Shadow within materializes

Unaware, there’s no time to prepare,

Unleashing its fury for all to bear

 

Strength it feeds from those who care,

Twisting and turning words and stares

Form is now what I once was,

It’s Poison if any… One of Love

 

Shadow now I, fight I try...

For those I hurt, my words are lies

Understand I cry, I feel your pain,

Ball and Chain, I am restrained

 

Pleasure filled, Darkness slips away,

Face left to those I've betrayed

Strength to hold on, You reach for my hand,

Smiling and Scarred, Your eyes Understand

 

SHADOW lingers and laughs within,

Your LOVE inside, he cannot win

 

Legacy

Author's Note

What is your Dark Secret - visit and enter yours today http://www.writerscafe.org/contests/-Volume-1%2C-Book-2--Dark-Secrets/13548/

P.S. Re-read and between the lines

Legacy

Reviews

[Luis Gabriel]

I love the minimalism! I love the shortness of the statements to really pack the punch of the emotion displayed! The only constructive work I would do is maybe some constructive imagery to tie the emotions to something I can see or feel, it feels alot like there are so many things felt blending all together I don't know where to start!

Great job, keep it up!

[Opey]

This is Nice. I appreciate the friend request, and this, being the first of your works I've read, assures me that you are a friend worth reading. This poem is something I can relate to; While I can't know your exact reasons and inspiration for writing this, I have my own emotions and memories that this lines up with rather flawlessly.
In my Opinion, and excellent work.

[V]

pretty good choice of words in this one. very descriptive, vivid words. my fav lines are: "Shadow now I, fight I try...For those I hurt, my words are lies".

[nathan]

Wow awsome. It's like gazing into a prism

[Trystin S. Bailey]

"Pleasure filled, darkness slips away" How often we experience this and its reversal throughout our lives...Lovely.

[Journeyed Soul]

Quite the piece. Dark, an admission of self, and yet there seems to be some hope in there. Maybe you can help me here with the reason why 'You' and 'Your' are personal words that are capitalized but 'he' at the end is not. Is it symbolic for the lack of power 'he' has over you now? Beautiful work!

[RienKelsoCinema]

This is definitely an example of a small body of words packing together such a big blow to anyone that has the capability to feel!

>Rïén Kelso

[habiba]

i lOve that strOng feelling yOu talk with...yOu have balanced between the lines...U have pictured that phOto infrOnt Of U...U shaped Ur pOint in wOrdS in the best way ever :D...bUt U can dO better

[Zane Mathias]

very intriguing! I love it and embrace it i know how you feel! A Great write, that came from the heart.

[Santiago Veracruz]

Well written and accessible, I see why so many enjoy your writing.

[Bloody_Stars]

Wow that is really good. I like the whole dark theme u got going on. I like how the words just matched with each other.