Dark Secrets

Lights Out... You can't find what you can't see. I’ve become a clouded face, unrecognized

DARK SECRETS

 

These eyes Tainted and Scarred,

The Heart restless behind bars,

A Soul lost between then and now

 

I’ve become a clouded face, unrecognized,

A Shadow within materializes

Unaware, there’s no time to prepare,

Unleashing its fury for all to bear

 

Strength it feeds from those who care,

Twisting and turning words and stares

Form is now what I once was,

It’s Poison if any… One of Love

 

Shadow now I, fight I try...

For those I hurt, my words are lies

Understand I cry, I feel your pain,

Ball and Chain, I am restrained

 

Pleasure filled, Darkness slips away,

Face left to those I've betrayed

Strength to hold on, You reach for my hand,

Smiling and Scarred, Your eyes Understand

 

SHADOW lingers and laughs within,

Your LOVE inside, he cannot win

 

Legacy

Author's Note

What is your Dark Secret - visit and enter yours today http://www.writerscafe.org/contests/-Volume-1%2C-Book-2--Dark-Secrets/13548/

P.S. Re-read and between the lines

Legacy

Reviews

[Luis Gabriel]

I love the minimalism! I love the shortness of the statements to really pack the punch of the emotion displayed! The only constructive work I would do is maybe some constructive imagery to tie the emotions to something I can see or feel, it feels alot like there are so many things felt blending all together I don't know where to start!

Great job, keep it up!

[Joshy1128]

truly an amazing piece. while i do agree with Luis on needing some imagery, u portray all the emotions. i really felt this poem, i was in it, not reading it. great job!

[Dylan (S.T)]

Great poem

[Susan M]

Luis has a good point. The emotions are powerful but I don't really know what you're talking about. Give us some concrete images to help us understand what you're trying to convey.

[Ben]

It's a great poem,nice work

[JustAnotherGirl]

This is yet another amazing poem. I wish i was this talented

[Broken Melody]

if words could express how good this poem is, then id have something more to write. Its dark, sad, angry. So many negitive things rolled up into one. Its so easy to relate to, because everyone has their own little dark passenger that follows them forever. Everyone has something inside that is unpleasant and unkind.....I LOVED IT!

[Mickey Christian Decicc..]

Pretty dark and hits home with some of the relationships I've had in the past. Keep up the good work :D

[kannerjay]

Beautiful.... I love it. I was unaware someone could be so poetic and....DIVINE with words. I will take this poem to heart~

[Jake Staffeld]

I liked it. Very black hearted. I like the way misery and love were associated.

[Kim Robinson]

like your imagery of eyes being scarred... the eyes as the windows of the soul, the reflection and absorption of light or darkness and the place where we must face those we have wounded or betrayed, yet also the window through which love can shine redemptive grace...