Dark Secrets

Lights Out... You can't find what you can't see. I’ve become a clouded face, unrecognized

DARK SECRETS

 

These eyes Tainted and Scarred,

The Heart restless behind bars,

A Soul lost between then and now

 

I’ve become a clouded face, unrecognized,

A Shadow within materializes

Unaware, there’s no time to prepare,

Unleashing its fury for all to bear

 

Strength it feeds from those who care,

Twisting and turning words and stares

Form is now what I once was,

It’s Poison if any… One of Love

 

Shadow now I, fight I try...

For those I hurt, my words are lies

Understand I cry, I feel your pain,

Ball and Chain, I am restrained

 

Pleasure filled, Darkness slips away,

Face left to those I've betrayed

Strength to hold on, You reach for my hand,

Smiling and Scarred, Your eyes Understand

 

SHADOW lingers and laughs within,

Your LOVE inside, he cannot win

 

Legacy

Author's Note

What is your Dark Secret - visit and enter yours today http://www.writerscafe.org/contests/-Volume-1%2C-Book-2--Dark-Secrets/13548/

P.S. Re-read and between the lines

Legacy

Reviews

[Luis Gabriel]

I love the minimalism! I love the shortness of the statements to really pack the punch of the emotion displayed! The only constructive work I would do is maybe some constructive imagery to tie the emotions to something I can see or feel, it feels alot like there are so many things felt blending all together I don't know where to start!

Great job, keep it up!

[Legacy]

The poem "DARK SECRETS" delves into the depths of a troubled soul, grappling with the weight of their inner darkness and the pain they've inflicted on others. The narrative unfolds as a battle between the speaker's true self and the Shadow, a personification of their destructive thoughts and actions.

The opening lines paint a vivid picture of the speaker's emotional turmoil, their eyes "Tainted and Scarred," reflecting the damage inflicted upon their spirit. The "Heart restless behind bars" represents their inner struggle, trapped within the confines of their own self-doubt and regret. The "Soul lost between then and now" captures the speaker's disconnection from their authentic self, haunted by the ghosts of their past mistakes.

The Shadow emerges as a menacing force, taking control of the speaker's actions and words, transforming them into a "clouded face, unrecognized." This transformation symbolizes the destructive power of the Shadow, distorting the speaker's identity and obscuring their true nature.

The Shadow feeds on the pain and vulnerability of those who care for the speaker, twisting their words and intentions, leaving behind a trail of hurt and betrayal. The speaker recognizes that they have become "Poison... One of Love," their misguided attempts at connection causing more harm than good.

Despite the Shadow's grip, the speaker is not entirely consumed by darkness. A glimmer of hope emerges in the form of their connection with another individual. This person's unwavering love and understanding provide a beacon of light, offering the speaker a chance for redemption.

The Shadow attempts to resist this intrusion of love, lingering and laughing within the speaker's mind. However, the power of love proves to be stronger, offering the speaker a path towards healing and self-acceptance.

The poem concludes with a sense of cautious optimism. The Shadow may still lurk within, but the speaker has found solace in the knowledge that they are not alone. The love and understanding they've experienced offer a lifeline, providing strength and hope for the future.

[no tell writer]

Shadow now I, fight I try...
For those I hurt, my words are lies
Understand I cry, I feel your pain,
Ball and Chain, I am restrained

I can really feel this write, I can relate to this a lot, i love this stanza

[Dagger Jones]

very good my friend ! You got rythum in ur rhyme !

[Lisette]

I love it, I totally understand!

[~Jennifer Holly Cole~&c..]

Well done. Love wins...always. :D

[Shadow]

I enjoyed this on so many levels, I've been away for years and have finally returned but this is a surprise I'm glad I made it back to read.Just need more towards the visual.

[Paul Ramnora]

There's something about this poem which, really and truly, rings a bell from deep down within. ;-)

[mom50801]

I love this! It speaks on so many levels of emotions.

[HamonoAkira]

"Strength to hold on, You reach for my hand,
Smiling and Scarred, Your eyes Understand"
--I feel like these made me breathe. The first stanzas were constricting me, holding me back and gripping me like I cannot breathe. Then I go to these lines and I felt alive. I felt hope and light. This is a wonderful poem. It invites me to look into the positive facet of everything.

[Wesley D. Stein]

This is good. Reminds me of a single mother struggling with how to raise a child alone. Comma usage may need a tweak. Overall, well written poem with good subversive imagry.