~ True Love ~

 

 

 Tr.u.e. L.o.v.e.

 ‘Bridges’ yet crossed - or even burned

 

That afternoon in autumn,

 

 the Sun began releasing ‘Her Tears of Hope’,

 

 Standing there embracing,

 

looking up, as a light mist caressed our faces…

 

True Love, Indeed… the strongest, matched by no other

Lost in attraction, steady ones breath, are you listening?

Interpersonal love, shaped of elements of fallacy -

Spawns the birth, now borne of Love or Infatuation?

 

Jane Doe: “When we talk, you're always attentive to everything”

John Doe: “I Love how you cook, clean and treat me like a King”

 

Love begins of innocence, nothing short of harmless

Craving sense of mystery, passing boundaries, no expectations

Desire to please; you do not want to possess…

Engulfed in Flames of shadowed passions, your heart at rest!

 

Jane Doe: “You used to dive in, exploring my shores”

John Doe: “You appreciated, respected my Love. Now…you Expect so-much-more.”

 

Choices made, perceptions viewed, push to shove…

Could you spend your life, 24 hours a day with the one you Love?

Can Love last forever…? What do we 'choose' to sacrifice…? Exactly…  

Explore the nature, understanding the function of Love.

 

Jane Doe: “Ashamed I am, concealing pain with silent cries �" you never cared”

John Doe: “You thrive on mind games of torment and despair”

 

Pain vibrates, shattered dreams, crossing lines of gray

Tomorrow, soon will deliver an 'envelope of dismay'

Rhythm of dance, life once treasured, now lost forever…

To each left scars, unseen, chiseled within their soul...

 

Jane Doe: “I guess you never really loved me at all!”

John Doe: “Go ahead and take another picture off the wall!”

 

 

 

On first glance, Love (First Love, for the second time, third or so-on)

We believe this is {True Love}…

 

Is this possible?

Do we have an idea of their favorite color, number, T.V. show and/or what makes them (tick)?

No~… We seem to judge the visible aspects such as appearance, smell, things outwardly that pulls us in.

 

Can Love really be defined?  Does True Love ever fail us?

 Are 'We' willing to work through differences together? (Not by looking in front of 'Us')

 We seem to exclude ourselves �" that’s right… This is a one-way-street, right…?

Love...in all facets -

A development of ‘who we are'...Want to ‘be’...What we can ‘do/be’ for others…

SILENT PROMISE 'ONCE MADE', LEFT DROWNING IN A SOUR GLASS OF WINE... 

Does True Love 'Ever Die'...?

  

 ~Legacy

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Reviews

[Tania Leigh]

A unique format made this fun to read.....the stanzas in red, to me, are like a narrator speaking his piece, and then his voice fades away in time for the vignettes of dialogue.

I can easily see this acted out on a stage with spot lighting alternating between Jane & John Doe and the narrator, who is off to the side.

A wonderfully insightful write about the cycles of love and human relationships.

[Trisha]

I love how you used color in your poem to make it stand out and the Jane and John doe is very cool. Also, I love the subject, one of my favorites!!! Very powerful, stands out and is written with passion from start to finish. Well done my friend. Thanks for the invite.

[Lee W. Deason]

I find it to be real, good job. It has the natural taste of relationship, and attachment gone wrong on the right path.
: ) Once again good job man.

[DeAn]

This bespeaks of a total relationship and not the touch of "puppy love" or "infatuation", such as most love is defined these days. I believe true is unreachable only because we lack truth in our daily lives therefore can not claim it in our relationships either. we must first seek to claim the truth of the reality we exist in, then we can overcome the misuse of love.

until then we are left with the only love we have accumilated in our lives thus far.

great write.

l8r g8r
-Tao

[Melanie Jane Boicourt S..]

You ask how to end it but it looks like it has an ending. I think that if you really want my advice, I would end with one more 'Jane Doe, John Doe, answer to the last question.

Does True Love 'Ever Die'...?

A couple of typos if you wanted to know.

"Interpersonal love, shaped of elements of fallacy -Spawns the birth, now borne of Love or Infatuation?"
This does not seem like a question. Is it meant to be?

"We seem to judge the visible aspects such as appearance, smell, things outwardly that pulls us in."
I think that the word should be 'pull' not "pulls".

I like this writing and its unique way of blending poetry with quote-like sayings.
Men and women have such a problem communicating sometimes.
Men speak their mind which hurts womens feelings.
Women expect men to read thier minds and are upset when they don't which confuses men.
Communication is the key to a relationship. No matter how much two people love each other, if they do not communicate (and I am not just talking about words, actions and body language speak so much) then it would be hard for a couple to make it. True love or not.
Thank you for sharing.
Love All, Mejasha

[J. Hampton]

A clever write...posing a provocative discussion
This...is a love that never "was"...the 1st snippet of dialog shows bit.
true ..." LOVE"...

cannot die

my only response is.....

read my poem " The L word "


Blessssssssss

[Darkshadow]

It seems to me that the protagonists of this poem start with bliss fueled revelry and then coast slowly to a stop as reality takes hold and the new morphs into something old and tiresome.

It's a wonderful poem! It's deep and true to the heart, and I can't say enough good things about the way that you have delivered it.

You asked how close is it to reality. I have a suggestion. By no means am I some grand writer though I do tend to scribble here and there. This feels unfinished to me. There are still emotions and the bitter sweet of life that have not been explained or described in what you have written here. You haven't come full circle.

I wonder if you might consider this ending.... (I'm going to shorten the copy/paste as to try and keep in the rules)

For one reason or another you have left your standard in the prose and omitted the dialogue toward the end. I think this is something you might reconsider.

(You wrote:)Can Love really be defined? Does True Love ever fail us?
Jane Doe: It's your weekend with the kids. I have a date with the greatest guy. Can you pick them up at 7?
John Doe: It's your weekend with the kids. I have a date with the greatest gal. Can you pick them up at 7?

I suggest the above because of the petty jealousies that are inevitable in any breakup/divorce. It seems, that when people separate, the only comfort is seeing how miserable their counterpart is. Misery is used as a gauge to measure how much the other may or may not have cared when they were together.

(poem content)
(You wrote:) Does True Love 'Ever Die'...?
Jane Doe: Will he be another thing I have to survive?
John Doe: Will she be another thing I have to survive?

I suggest the above for one reason only. Once true love has come and gone... we are a bit gun shy. We are left with doubt about ourselves and those we allow into our hearts.

Per the suggestions I make here, there is still the feeling that it is never truly over. Love is fleeting, but... still... like a moth to a flame, we race forward even though we may yet again be burned.

No matter what, I loved the poem, but you asked in your message... 'how close to reality is it?' This is how I would end it, with hope, and trepidation, and the true reality of love found and lost and a life that comes full circle yet again. I'm sure you can do it more justice than I have here, and I really hope to read more of your work in the future. Thank you.

[Spirit <White Wolf&g..]

omg. that is just too true. But in some peoples eyes. Love is a silent promise that will break like a fragile glass in the moonlights wake. I see love as a fragile glass. That if something slips it will break and shatter. To me, you must be careful. Love can be great but also devastating. Be cautious who you open your heart to, for they can betray you and play games like the moonlight. Very good poem. I love it. I see truth in it more than anything, I also see beauty and words that did not come easy.
~Spirit~
*May the spirit of the wolves guide and protect you.*

[Jazmyne]

i have to say this "wow" this piece of work read with so much power and life. i feel as if it was reading my actions with an ex. the red writting made me think of the person was thinking in his head when he got interupeted be the remarks of jane doe. i love how different this was, it wasnt like anything ive read.

[desertraven]

you hit the nail right on. Does true love ever die? I think, it remains in a state of suspended animation, awaiting the compass to dictate the next course of action. Depending upon the variables, could go either way, to newer heights or depths of dispair, therefore, revealing if the love is true or merely, an infactuation.
Sandra

[sunlight]

well i dont know what you mean about 'reality' it doesnt seem that way to me even though its well written .I dont get reality form it just a story of sorts ,not an insult ,its well done otherwise